New VERY Short Film Script
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New VERY Short Film Script
Ok, this is an Idea I've had for a while and I've just finished the script. It basically describes my life (without the filming and without showing the love for Nintendo). Here it is:
SATRURDAY
INT. JAKE’s House (Kitchen) – Day
A boy (JAKE) picks up a pepper and an onion from the vegetable rack and takes them to the kitchen. JAKE starts throwing them up in the air and dancing with them. He drops the onion on the floor.
JAKE
s***!
He picks up the onion and puts it on the work top. He tries to get down the wok, but he can’t reach. He grabs a chair and climbs up it to get the wok. He gets it, but it clatters on the cooker.
JAKE
f***!
He moves the wok, but the handle of it hits the toaster causing it to make a sound.
JAKE
s***!
JAKE looks at the table and sees a bag of potatoes.
JAKE
Potatoes?
Fade to Titles (apart from the main title (“Saturdayâ€
SATRURDAY
INT. JAKE’s House (Kitchen) – Day
A boy (JAKE) picks up a pepper and an onion from the vegetable rack and takes them to the kitchen. JAKE starts throwing them up in the air and dancing with them. He drops the onion on the floor.
JAKE
s***!
He picks up the onion and puts it on the work top. He tries to get down the wok, but he can’t reach. He grabs a chair and climbs up it to get the wok. He gets it, but it clatters on the cooker.
JAKE
f***!
He moves the wok, but the handle of it hits the toaster causing it to make a sound.
JAKE
s***!
JAKE looks at the table and sees a bag of potatoes.
JAKE
Potatoes?
Fade to Titles (apart from the main title (“Saturdayâ€
RE: New VERY Short Film Script
got a rather foul mouth for an 11 year old, shocking stuff...
is there a moral or message to this short is it a comedy i couldn't tell
is there a moral or message to this short is it a comedy i couldn't tell
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Haha! I was laughing. The whole feel of it reminds me heavily of some of Ornsack's sketches. (that's a compliment!)
"Potatoes?" ahaha. So random.
I'd watch it. Definitely.
"Potatoes?" ahaha. So random.
I'd watch it. Definitely.
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RE: New VERY Short Film Script
thats pretty funny, cept for the answwering machine bit was ripped off family guy, but yeh...
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lol, even Ornsack's sketches don't have that many swears per minute!OutcastJiob wrote:Haha! I was laughing. The whole feel of it reminds me heavily of some of Ornsack's sketches. (that's a compliment!)
Honestly, I just don't get this script. I suppose it might be funnier if I saw it in film...but it seems a little too random. What the heck is the point?
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Some of the things the main character does just kind of makes him annoying. You don't really sympathize with him, because you think he's kind of a twit. Parts are funny though. I say you should develop the girl scene further, not necessarily make it into a romantic pursuit, but just develop that scene. Good potential for a pretty funny conversation.
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