New short....really short

[justin!butcher]

Ok, me and my little brothers where bored so we spent about ten minutes making this. please dear God dont judge me on this tho. IT honestly was about a half an hour in the making

http://www.realworldservers.com/movies/evan/evan.mov

If the server is really slow its my fault. Its new and we're experimenting

[justin!butcher]

...No comments....

[Ornsack]

I tried downloading it last night but it took too damn long and I got impatient

[naflish]

put it on www.savefile.com please

[ctbullet]

took no time at all to load....

don't understand why you've posted this on a fourm and have asked for no critical comment

screw that

i couldn't tell whether your actor where hobits or people, they were like 3 ft tall

and one 'elite' guy looked like he was wearing a hawaiin grass skirt

but other than that it was well filmed

[justin!butcher]

The server changed the format last night so it loads fast. The hobits wehre the only people available to act...they are acutall people... And If you saw something wron with it please comment, but keep in mind it was all put together in about a half an hour

[ipon70]

E for Effort, seemed to just start and end........more like it was the middle of something else.

[DEDFX]

Try not to ever zoom, too many cuts for a camera shot in the forrest, take orange off the guns, you didn't need the music at the end, just the walking part was fine.

!USE A TRIPOD AND STEADYCAM!

[blue_dirt]

More coverage. I wanted to see feet running in the snow, close ups of their faces, breath in the cold air, close ups of the weapons, etc. If you had more coverage you could have had faster cuts to go with the music. The story was clear and your angles and shots were good.

[Truggy]

Ok.

After watching this im thinking to myself "why am i watching this?!"....C on the effort, because you tried, it's all trial and error with this things. I must agree you need to severly work on this. Second, i hate it, just HATE it when people use music from say "the matrix" and stuff like that. Find something origional. Second, When you are using guns, get electrial tape and put it on the ends of em, That way when i look i'll potentially see its real. TRIPOD TRIPOD TRIPOD....Cannot stress this enough. I dont think anyone can. If you would of got more creative angles, and put more of a story to it, it would of made more sense. All i saw from this was a few people, walking through woods with guns, shooting at some other guy...that to me is the boner killer right there. Am i suppost to suspend disbelief and think "hrm, maybe there is a story, but i just cant see it"...I shouldnt have to do that. Make a story, and try again.. Take this as me trying to help ya, not as me being an uptight pri_ck...I know i sound like one, but hey, u only get better if you try.

-Nick M <truggy>

[maj_barnes]

Closer angles on actors, add muzzle flashes or pretend to have recoil, add more rather than just end with shooting.