The Crow: Dark Redemption

[NGFilms03]

My friends and I are starting production on this film tomorrow. Nothing big really, we're just going to shoot some preliminary shots in this old, abandoned house we found. Then we can get the title sequence together and get moving with the rest of the picture.

If anyone would like to take a look at the script so far, here it is. (Sorry about the title sequence being scripted, but I had to explain to my friends what I was doing with it) Any comments or constructive criticism is welcome.


THE CROW: DARK REDEMPTION


OVER BLACK

The credits play across the screen, sliding in and casually fading away.

...“NIPPLE GOOSE FILMS PRESENTâ€

[Bugalicious]

nice start to the script. just a couple things. are you going to have the Voice Over that the crow films had, "a crow would bring them back...". Also wouldnt the cops have removed the weapons from the floor of the abandon house? and id think that jones would be more p*** off before he gets his arm snapped. other than that its good.

[NGFilms03]

Thanks alot. But nope, no voice over. The third film didn't actually have one either. And the weapons on the floor are his that he's collected to take his revenge, not the murder weapons.

[Chainsaws_R_Fun]

Right, pretty good, but not original in the least. That first scene is directly from the first book by J O'barr except you've changed the action and dialogue ever so slightly. Or is it supposed to be the movie of the book? I'm confused.

[reflexive_cinematics]

Right, pretty good, but not original in the least. That first scene is directly from the first book by J O'barr except you've changed the action and dialogue ever so slightly. Or is it supposed to be the movie of the book? I'm confused.

haha, ooooooooooooh busted.

jk

[Bugalicious]

Hey NGF, are you still making this film?

[NGFilms03]

yep, productions just been slowed down due to our lead actor suffering an injury. it will be made but at the moment we're concentrating on getting our other film, Sanguinary Man, finished. I've uploaded a teaser and a couple of clips on here. Check them out if you havn't already. I'd love to hear some more opinions.

[amathyst]

This film will never get made NGFilms 03 is talking out his a***!Im the co owner and it will never be made!The actor didnt suffer no injuries, it was just lack of interest

[amathyst]

This film will never get made NGFilms 03 is talking out his a***!Im the co owner and it will never be made!The actor didnt suffer no injuries, it was just lack of interest

[NoRemorse]

Hush.

[amathyst]

Dont tell me to hush!Just cause your rubbish at making films!

[NoRemorse]

Hey! Enough with the personal attacks! I was just telling you to hush coz you posted the same post twice, two minutes later. You don't have to be a pr*ck.

[amathyst]

Well i didnt mean to post twice, i have to say tho good acting!not. ' Man this is the funniest s**t ive ever heard'

[NoRemorse]

Yeah, well, he's not in our movie anymore. We kicked him out coz of that performance.

"KATE, I'M DESPERATE!" LOL

By the way, what the f*ck is a Sangu-watever Man?

[amathyst]

Yeah thanks A* student at drama actually matey!

[NoRemorse]

Well so am I, but you don't hear me bragging. And I'm a A* in media studies, best in my year. And A* English, also top of my year. Shall I go on? And I was making kick-a** movies while you were still p*** your pants.

[amathyst]

Ok darling calm it, my opinion my view! Every film ive seen of yours are very cliched and quite the dull and poor acting.And remind me what film have you made that is better then Sanguinary Man?

[NoRemorse]

None, Sanguinary Man's the best low-budget film I've ever seen. But what films of mine have you actually seen? That one scene from Dead Weight? A couple of rough edits of Powder? Reserve judgment until you actually SEE one of my films in full. If you like you can come to the premiere of POWDER with Matt. We're playing Sanguinary Man there to. But don't blast me before you've seen my flicks.

[amathyst]

Alright darling, ive seen most of powder. Wheres the premiere?

[NoRemorse]

Mark Rutheford. And I don't think you've seen most of it. It's 70 minutes long.

[amathyst]

WTF!How did you make it that long we struggle to make it half an hour

[NoRemorse]

We had a feature length story to tell. It's about a very eventful week in the life of a gangster. It couldn't be told in 25 minutes. It's easy to make a feature film if you have a very definate three-part structure and a lot of planning.

[amathyst]

Ne ideas for our new film? Were on writers block!Were trying to make something like Fight Club

[NoRemorse]

How about... bored office-worker guy meets crazy, radical activist guy. By some freak occurance, they become best buddies, and decide to enter a life of crime. They're main thing is huge insurance fraud, like they blow up the place where crazy activist works while he was supposed to be in there, then dress up like his mum and collect insurance. Then activist starts to become obsessed with changing his face so that the cops can't get him. After everybig crime he commits (bank robberies, muggings etc.) he gets extensive plastic surgery. Then one day he disappears for about two weeks. One morning, office-worker wakes up and he's wanted for murder. After being chased by the police he finally meets up with activist in the office block office-worker works in. ACTIVIST HAS OFFICE-WORKER'S FACE! And that's all I got. That's just off the top of my head.