Battle of the Bulge script so far

[tallman_house_pictures]

Hey guys,
Heres what Igot so far for my battle of the bulge short (with no title yet) I wil lbe adding stuff over the next 2 weeks. Production will start in mid december.


“Battle of the Bulge film Projectâ€

[Themovieman44]

THP, this is one of the worst scripts I have ever seen. Not necessarily because of the story. It isn't bad, well it is history so the story is already there. But more or less because of the formatting and planning.

Soldiers walk for app. 15 seconds

Camera cuts to Sgt. Messton unlatching his safety.

These shouldn't be in your script. Soldiers walk for approx. 15 seconds is something that should be done rather than told. Film how ever much you need. Don't set a specific limit.

A German shout “Auchtung!â€

[SgtPadrino]

Also, the guy was just shot twice. So the squad leader says "Take five" like they're putting up their feet??

[NaziSentry]

Sould be more like, He's dead sir...

[I3lade203]

Ok well , it's not much, i'm not saying you have to, but I recommend using standard format, it's hard to read like this, for me at least. The story I guess is okay so far, just work on that format. If you need help, you know where to find me on MSN.

[asapfilms]

battle of the bulge sounds like someone fighting an erection???!!! Maybe a title change

[I3lade203]

The title sounds fine to be, becuase battle of the bulge was a real battle.

[asapfilms]

...sounds weird to someone that doesnt know that

[SgtPadrino]

Um, the Battle of the Bulge was also the battle that broke the German army's back and basically won the war. s***, I even heard about it when I was like six, how could you not know about it?

[2nd_Recon]

You do know about the existance of tanks, right (The millitary kind)

About the script. The dialog is a little robotic. But if you write scripts the way I do, then it is explanable. What I do is I just write the script first. Then, when I'm done with it, I look it over and change the script so that the lines fit with each characters emotion, situation, personality, etc. When I first write it, I worry myself with just getting the point across, then "Beef it Up" later.

And with the way everyone is complaining with the format? In my opinion, if the director can make sence of it, it's good.

[Passit]

i'd definately go with the erection idea for comical effect - it could be his weapon of mass destruction

[2nd_Recon]

Able to destroy every tank in the Reich without remorse!

[justin!butcher]

yea, that dialogue* was far, far to robotic, it needs emotion, somthing behind what these soldiers are saying. It souinded like they didnt even care about the dude that was shot "is his health worth calling off the patrol" ? Your movie isnt going to be about the entire battle of the buldge, so think of somthing a little more precise for your title.
where do did you get the colts, thompsons ect?
keep working on it. i have been planning a movie along the same story line for more than two years now and im not nearly ready so take your time.

[I3lade203]

And with the way everyone is complaining with the format? In my opinion, if the director can make sence of it, it's good.

if he's asking us to help him, we have to understand it as well..

[2nd_Recon]

... This is a good point...