Trigger finger

[DAZMAN]

Hey,

I made this last year to show the implications/ gravity of murder




http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Rafl8jBnVe4


It would be nice to get your feed back

[Jperson]

Hmmm... it lingered quite a bit on the same shots and there wasn't very much to it, but no, I see what you were kinda going for but I think you could have done it a little better. And also, fill me in on the bullet bit, it missed right? Was the murder actually commited? It wasn't very clear.

6/10

[DAZMAN]

The whole idea for this is to be one main shot. The guy does die. It shows how in the blink of an eye when somone is killed, just how much is taken away, all thememories that make that person who he is.

[joe]

I enjoyed this piece. Very simple, yet quite effective. Murder is often the topic of many many films, TV shows, etc. Yet, the public has grown used to the idea, as if it is no longer a grotesque act, but one to be thrust into the limelight and paraded around.

As for the execution of the film itself, I didn't feel that the title card fit at all. It detracted from the film by removing the interest from the beginning shots, and thus interrupted the flow. It would have been more effective with no title card at all.

Also, the music seemed to go well when all of the memories were playing, but it might have benefited from having it shift to a somewhat darker or more melancholy sound when the bullet was about to hit.

In the same vein, I wish the death shot would have been more powerful. Not to say gorey or bloody, but possibly a flush of red or more of a look of pain on the boy's face, something just to show the finality and horror that a murder would carry with it. As it is now, the death almost seems as if it were a dream or just a finite feeling, rather than an eternal consequence.

Good thoughtful film mate. Cheers.

Joe

[JARHEAD]

Looked pretty good.. music went with the video, it had good editing... good job!

[ctbullet]

thats was a great piece of work, and i actually understood the implications!!

could have done with more shots of the kid growing up though

[SgtPadrino]

Good idea, but if you want to show how quickly things can take that kind of a drastic change, it probably shouldn't be that slow. Besides, most of the implications and gravity of murder come from the aftermath of the act, beyond the thought that someone's life is ending.

[DAZMAN]

Thanks for the feed back.


The idea is that killers pull the trigger and wipe out a person in a second, so a seconds all it takes to wipe out a life of events.

[rhys]

That was good, yeah if it was done a little faster with a bit more footage it would have been perfect. The effects were good, right up until u get that last shot of the cg bullet, then it looks as if its still in the shell for some reason. And i think you could have had a more dramatic ending though with the death, like he gets shot, there is a really big sound and lots of blood with difforent angles, and the black and white cuts out to see that.
And also, i didnt understand why he was flying above the city at the end. It may have been to show the soul, but you could have made it a little more... difforent?
For example: he does the same thing, except his chest is up, as if being pulled up by it, and he is getting raised instead of floating horizontal, he is also bright blue on 70% opacity. It would just look cooler i think.
I was also expecting it to go longer than 2 minutes.
Anyway, good work continue to make films, that was new and difforent, unlike many other films...

[DAZMAN]

thanks dude

[Vor]

i thought the part where the guy was falling onto the cars at the end was really cool lookin, how was that done?

[DAZMAN]

Laid a green screen on the floor, put a stool in the center, laid my actor on top of it, got him to wriggle, aimed the camera down, elevated it with a crane, filmed the backing plate off of a bridge.

[rhys]

I wanted to do basically the same thing once, exept underwater, but i couldnt get any underwater footage filmed from a birds eye view, and i dont have a waterproof case for my camcorder.

[SgtPadrino]

The idea is that killers pull the trigger and wipe out a person in a second, so a seconds all it takes to wipe out a life of events.

That's what I'm saying. The action of committing the murder took far too long to get your point across. Showing the footage of him as a kid could've been done beforehand. Once a nice and semi-nostalgic atmosphere is established, we see the kid getting shot in the face. It would better convey the abrupt end of someone's life because the audience isn't expecting that to happen - with your movie, as soon as the gun is fired and flashbacks are shown, we know exactly what's going to happen, detracting from the point you're trying to get across.

[Jperson]

You know Rhys I wanted some under water footage once, so I kinda experimented with a standard digi camera (which can film) and stuck it in a plastic bag under water! Worked great, it was a bit fuzzy 'cause of the covering, but then one day it all went horribly wrong... Yeah, we fixed it though, a little permenant damage, but it's OK, now it has another damned problem! Stupid thing!