Need suggestions

[bloodymess]

Hi!

I'll do around halloween a few performances as Katafalk the clown. In this i'll be juggling (balls, clubs, axes, severed limbs, baby heads), balloon twisting (still trying to find great horror-themed sculpts), performing various sideshow tricks (swallowing a fully inflated 260Q balloon, hammering a 6'' spike into my skull, escaping a straightjacket(if I can find one, I don't own one(for the moment)), and other goodies), most of which while on stilts.

I'm presently working on a trailer; I did something, but didn't like it much, and will start again from scratch (even finding a better makeup, this one's far too innocent looking).

I'm looking for some advice about redoing it; things I could add, effects I could apply, cinematography tips, etc. and i'm looking for your help.

here's the original:

http://youtube.com/watch?v=7OefQV4T0-U

i've already thought about shortening the blockhead part, replacing the red balloon at the end by a pink 260Q poodle, adding me perhaps twisting a hangman's noose or othe r implement of torture, and adding a part where I juggle with axes.

other than that, what should I improve/add/cut?

[santi]

Takes are too long. The closep of door lock is way too long. Next: Try to cut somethin from te take with door. Door is open, part of leg is inside CUT one arm, with fingers spread (it's cute, scary motiv) CUT clown is inside CUT close up of face CUT

Some spooky lights would be help and some smoke. Look into lens - keep contact with viewer.

Improve your makeup - hide your age and sex as much as possible. Mix Joker with Alice Cooper or The Crow (and add something from you). Add some veins on hands, teeth could be "rotten".
Show something "entertaining" - shot jugling balls or clubs and cut to jugling something horyfying (match the frames with simmilar positions of the objects).

So much for now.