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THREE DAY LIMIT SCRIPT (V. SHORT!!!!!!)

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Here is the first four scenes of THREE DAY LIMIT. Have a look, but I' not sure if I'll ever get this one filmed, will I ever get actors to learn those lines?? Hmmm...

THREE DAY LIMIT

1 INT. DARK ROOM - DAY
Close up on MARCUS’s face - very dark

MARCUS
(His face almost glowing, shaking) We have 3 days, I tell you! We only have 3 days! Why won’t anyone listen to me? We have 3 days left. We need to do something, but if only someone would listen to me!
You can only see MARCUS and not SAM behind him.
SAM
Listen MARCUS, come play, um Scrabble with us, yeah? Make you feel better?
MARCUS
No! We must do SOMETHING! We can NOT just sit here! We MUST do SOMETHING!
SAM
Scrabble?
MARCUS
Yeah.

Half of the main titles come up.

2 INT. HOUSE (BEDROOM) - DAY
Shot of ALEX setting up Scrabble. He lays the board out and gives everyone their letters.
MARCUS arranges and looks at his letters, then frowns.
MARCUS
I didn’t know you got numbers in Scrabble.
ALEX
You don’t.
SAM
Let’s see.
MARCUS
(Suddenly shouting) No! No! You can’t!
SAM
Woo! (Holds up hands defensivly) Hold on, I was just… (Trails off)
MARCUS storms out.
ALEX shrugs.

3 INT. HOUSE (BEDROOM 2) - DAY

Shot of MARCUS sitting on his bed with his head in his hands, sulking.
MARCUS
They don’t understand! They just don’t. We have three days and they’re sitting there playing Scrabble with stupid NUMBERS! Why doesn’t anyone else get it? THREE STUPID DAYS!
VOICE
You’re under arrest, please remain calm and stay still, anything you say will be taken down and may be used against you if you receive a trial. Do you understand?
Fade out.

Rest main titles appear.

4 INT. HOUSE (KITCHEN) - DAY
Two boys standing, with shot profile on them.

JOE
Behold my prepared statement regarding fashion crime... my scheming weasel elegantly orchestrated the criminalisation of our bombastic diseased ideology!
PETER
What on Earth?
JOE
You fatten by the day like a truculent cereal crop!
PETER
What?
JOE
A migratory American Mushroom Institute could lose better than you!
PETER
Are you dissing me?
JOE
(sighs) (sarcastic) No, no I’m not.
PETER
Good – keep it that way.
JOE
You trade liberty for safety like a vainglorious No-Eyed Big-Eyed Wolf Spider!
PETER
Stop it! What ever that means just stop it!
JOE
You bowl like an illegitimate former British Prime Minister James Callaghan!
PETER
I bowl better than you! 5 out of 5 strikes, to your, oh, let me think, oh… it was 0. Oh, of course…
JOE
You fan the flames of ethnic hatred like a worrying vanguard party!
PETER
At least I HAVE parties, unlike someone I know!
JOE
You know someone, I hadn’t noticed!
MATT
(from off shot) You both develop an exciting new cob-without-corn concept like alternate Egg Marketing Boards! Just shut up!
JOE
Hey, that was quite a good one.
MATT walks into shot.
PETER
Wow! I wasn’t arguing, MATT! He started i… (trails off)
MATT
(Interrupting) I don’t care who started it, but I do care about something else!
PETER and JOE look at each other, quizzically.
MATT
Haven’t you heard? Or are you both so non-plussed idiots, who stink of last night’s orange juice swimming gala, that you missed the font size 50 headlines in all the newspapers and the lead story stripped across each news channel, like a pre-historic fearfully large lizard after its pray?


PETER
Umm… I actually don’t know how to reply….
JOE
Behold my prepared statement regarding the news headline... the infidel enemy rashly contaminated the right sized bowel motion! You are too generous in crediting me with the news headline. Really, all the damned acclaim belongs to the Imperialist aggressors.
PETER
This is WAY over my head…
MATT
JOE, you don’t even know what the headline is before you start distancing yourself… For all you know it may be something that you would prefer to be stacked among your small shelf of achievements.
PETER
He just said something…
JOE
But our North American continental landmass between Canada and Mexico led me to believe that I could rely on your highly un-compromised and heavily developed mind to not notice me missing the news headlines!

MATT
You must always keep up with the news!
PETER
Not so in fairyland!
JOE
So what is the news headline?
MATT
You keep up with news headlines like an AirPort-ready Ottoman Empire! You keep up with news headlines like an outer-suburban Queen Elizabeth I, the Virgin Queen! You keep up with news headlines like an organic cautionary tale! Your royal seal is an illicit penguin, so go keep up with news headlines better like the unfounded new Soviet man you are.
JOE
Sorry.
MATT
Oh… sorry makes it all better does it? Anyway the news headline. A boy disappeared. His name was MARCUS. Mean anything to you two, well not PETER, obviously, nothing means anything to him?
JOE
MARCUS? I heard that name before. Oh yeah, he was the disloyal commemorative coin like person who appeared on the call-in part of that radio show. He knew something about the 3 day limit, not much. He just blurted out, to the highly surprised illicit gondola presenter ‘We only have 3 days!! Why won’t you do something?’ before they whipped him off air.
MATT
Good. But that headline was three weeks ago… The three day limit passed so long ago it almost has been stored to back-up file in my memory, ready to be translucently and slyly slid into my short term memory.
JOE
Oooh, that is unfortunate…
MATT
MARCUS was right, though and he disappears, I hate to sound like the nerdy brats who star in stunningly successful kiddie detective programs where the ‘meddling kids’ should always have stayed out of it… and ooh here is a piece of paper with the murderer’s name on it, maybe it’s a clue programmes.
JOE
You always sound like the nerdy brats who star in stunningly successful kiddie detective programs where the ‘meddling kids’ should always have stayed out of it… and ooh here is a piece of paper with the murderer’s name on it, maybe it’s a clue programmes
PETER
Richiedo che ho avuto un punto di riferimento anche, che ha entrato esattamente sopra in questa alta discussione del mosca fra due del mio sociale migliorato.
JOE
Hey, he just said, literally translated, I demand that I have had a point of reference also, that has entered exactly over in this high argument of improved Moscow between two of my social one, but I think it meant social betters instead of Moscow and ones instead of one…
PETER
I did, maybe I did, why did I say that, it was a weird thing to say.
JOE
Ah…
MATT
So, to business, we will find this young MARCUs of 3 weeks ago and we shall find what he know before the destruction really begins. (slight smile) I’m just sooo brilliant.
Fade out.
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Will no-one comment?
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I know I'm double posting, but it's been, what, 19 days since I posted this, and still no responce! Is anybody going to comment?
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For heavens sake 143 views!!
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I enjoyed it. Does this have anything to do with the "Seven Day Project?"

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By that I mean the Monday, Tues., Wed. etc thing.
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You enjoyed it? Wow!!!! High praise, lol, um, na this isn't anything to do with the seven day project (At the mo!)
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I did like it. The only review you got lol. But I did enjoy it quite much
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Yeah I know!!! Hello, is ANYONE else gonna review it, or am I gonna be left lnely in the corner? :(
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in the corner... lol
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Yes in corner, please don't rub it... lol. ANyone else out there? at all?
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yeah. It's ok.
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Thank you.
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I did enjoy it but found the repeated use of complex syntax a bit irritating, and som eof the similies were a little random, almost as if they were there to make it sound good without actually improving the script. just my thoughts.
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Sorry? Syntax... I don't understand...:D Isn't syntax computer scripting.... And the similies are meant to be random, but yeah I agree with you. :D
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I liked it the conversation kinda blends in
Im sure it will look great on screen!
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Yah...if it gets to screen, which I kinda doubt, since I wrote it as an experimental script, but I'm happy to finish the script and give it to anyone willing to film it (as long as I get a credit :D). Alternatively maybe I'll give it a year or two then have a go at it. Waiting to get a good camera really till I properly plunge into making like propper propper films (whatever that means!). Thanks, glad you liked it.
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