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The Pentegram FREE SCRIPT

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this is basically the same as the other script i couldnt be bothered finnishing it me and my friends decided we would rather watch movies than make them.
do whatever you like with it just credit me please :)
so basically yeh everything i said in the voice. (except this one is better, me thinks)
FADE IN:


INT. OPENING SCENE - DAY

shows hamish in car (passenger) holding present and looking
out window.
-opening titles begin- keeps driving then pulls over out
front a house, he gets out walks up to the front door and
rings bell
waits a bit then another leith answers the door and greets
him in.

-Fade Out-

-Fade In- (its night)
theres wrapping paper strewn over the ground and junk food
lying around. shows the 3 playin ps2, they finnish up the
game

LEITH
(triumphantly)
haha, i win again, well im
gonna go on the internet and see
if i can find some scary stuff


HAMISH
k, dont wet yourself
tho...remember last time? (he
smiles)


LEITH
hey, you shut-up, that was wen we
were 6


HAMISH
wat-ever, same maturity


leith rolls his eyes and walks out of room to the computer.
the other 2 go back to the playstation,

DYLAN
so...wat do you wanna play now?


HAMISH
i dunno, (gets up and walks over
to shelf) how about...san-andreas?


DYLAN
nah, sick of that


HAMISH
okay then... tony hawk 4?


DYLAN
Hmmm, maybe-


Leith comes in

LEITH
hey guys, come and check this out


the 2 get up and walk out with leith.
they all gather round the computer, leith clicks play on a
site and a video starts playin.
shows a few shaky shots of rooms with a black hooded figure
walking through or towards the camera, they watch for a bit
then-

HAMISH
hey pause it there-


leith clicks pause

HAMISH
look (he points at the screen,
they all lean a little closer)


LEITH
woh


camera shows computer screen and the paused video shows
hooded figure walkin through a room with a wood heater and a
window next to it, they all turn around. its the same room
they are in.

DYLAN
okay...


HAMISH
wat does it say?


LEITH
the description says its real
video footage of pesadilla


HAMISH
wats pesadilla?


LEITH
dunno


HAMISH
google it


leith brings up google and types in pesadilla, he clicks on
the top result

LEITH
(reading from
web-page)
pesadilla, the night of september
11 at the house of 96 main street
ulverstone. every 10 years on this
night a person in that house will
be posessed by a demon, and so
begins a night of ruthless and
satanic killings until no-one in
the house is left alive. before a
person is killed, they are branded
with a pentagram , therefore
binding their soul to hell. if
they are not killed withing the
hour, they too will become
posessed and continue the
slaughtering.
this year -2006- will be the 9th
night of pesadilla.


HAMISH
(fakely facinated)
Mmmmm, now if you'll excuse me, i
gotta take a leak.


he turns around and walks away.

DYLAN
how could you not know about this?


LEITH
well ive only lived here 9 years


DYLAN
pfft, watever. go onto something
else


-Cuts To Bathroom-

shows hamish flush toilet, walks over to sink and washes
hands, then splashes a bit on his face. he then looks up and
jumps to see a hooded figure standing behind him, he is
speechless, then the hooded figure grabs him and it -cuts
back to computer-

leith and dylan are just browsing

LEITH
hey hamish is takin his time isnt
he?


DYLAN
(he just shrugs)


a faint clatter is heard

LEITH
did you just hear that?


DYLAN
uh... i think so


leith get s up and walks out, dylan follows, when they get
to the bathroom the lights off, leith turns the light on and
right in there face is hamish with pale white skin and
bleeding eyes.

LEITH
(both of them)
AAHhh!


hamish then starts grabbing out and grabs dylans arm and
squeezes it hard

DYLAN
OW! what the hell?


leith starts backing off then turns around and runs, dylan
does the same and hamish runs after them.
they run into his bedroom and slam the door but hamish
resists and they are both struggling to open/close the door

LEITH
(at the door)
(he points at the desk) the chair!


dylan obeys and grabs the chair at the desk and jams it
under the door handle. hamish bangs on the door a few more
times then gives up. the 2 slump to the ground



INT. THE BEDROOM - NIGHT

-fade in-
pans across room shows chair under door handle, leith
slumped against wall and dylan sitting on the bed. they are
both thinking.

DYLAN
pesadilla, pesadilla...i know that
word, thats it, its italian for
nightmare


LEITH
except this is no dream


DYLAN
mmm


leith then gets up walks over to wardrobe and brings a box
out of it.

DYLAN
whats that?


LEITH
not sure, my parents gave it to me
when i was young. said to open it
on my 14th birthday.


DYLAN
today,


LEITH
yeh, i must have forgot in all the
confusion,


he gently opens the box and lifts out a pile of papers.

DYLAN
whats in it?


LEITH
news paper clippings (he reads a
couple out) "7 dead in misterious
murders" "strange killings on main
street" ( he picks up another
sheet) and this is a print of that
thing we read on the net.


he sits thinking for a min. then a look of realisation comes
across his face.

LEITH
they knew all along...and thats
why dad gave me the gun


DYLAN
huh?


leith crawls over to the desk and brings out a case from the
bottom draw. as he opens it and lifts out a hand gun he
explains-

LEITH
dad gave me this at the same time
as the box, he said that it would
protect me one day, i guess he
meant today.


DYLAN
Mmmm...(thinking) you've gotta
shoot me


LEITH
what?!


DYLAN
look, (he shows him his arm and
burned in the skin was a
pentegram)


LEITH
im not going to shoot my friend


DYLAN
but you have to... you know what
the site said, if im not killed
within an hour i will be posessed
and i will kill you.


LEITH
i told you, im not going to kill
you


DYLAN
(he lifts leiths arm up so the gun
is pointing at his head) do it,


LEITH
no


DYLAN
i said DO IT! you have to youve
got no choice


LEITH
yes i do! and i said no


dylan is still holding his arm

DYLAN
listen... if you do not kill me
right now i will become (he
motions towards the door) one of
those, and i will KILL YOU


LEITH
NO!


DYLAN
YES!


LEITH
NO!


suddenly dylan falls to the ground and is being dragged
under the bed by his feet.

DYLAN
quick! shoot me now!-


leith just slowly backs away shaking his head, until dylan
is engulfed entirely under the bed. the lamp starts
flickering and he grabs a torch on the desk, the light goes
out and he turns the torch on. then the camera is from his
view and he slowly walks toward the bed, crouches down and
hesitantly lifts the drapes, and bam! right in his face is
dylan pale skinned and eyes bleeding.

the same as hamish he imediately starts groping out at him
and he crawls from under the bed. leith stumbles back and
drops the gun. the lamp comes back on. he leans against the
wall, and suddenly the chair comes out from under the door
handle and hamish stumbles in. the 2 of them start closing
in on leith, closer and closer, then dylan reaches up and
presses his hand against leiths forehead, when he brings it
away, a pentegram is burned in his skin.
-cut to black-



THE END
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Yeah uh, i dont think anyone will use that. No offence, but its bad.
It lacks actual story. It goes from what seems to be a prolonged party into a 20 second possesion and then the ending.
I personally wouldnt use it, some one else might, so probably thankyou for putting it on the site.
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i dont give a fu*king sh*t about what you think rhys, i already know you think they're cr*p. i never said anyone would use it, i never said anyone wouldnt. can you please just fu*k up about every little thing i do for 2 fu*cking seconds? fu*king shithead, your so damn busy trying to p*** everybody off and trying to insult everyone that your completely un-aware that your head is stuck so god-damn fu*king far up your a**. god fu*king cuntface, and please do not go thinking that im suddenly saying this because your said something i thought of was cr**, ive pretty much always fu*king thought this because of your whole fu*king attitude.
now excuse me while i duck under the desk because it sounds like another attack at my clone movie
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Calm down zac. Saying 'f***' isnt going to make things right... believe me i know. Jesus calm down. I put a nice comment in that, but i noted that it wasnt well thought out. I also gave some help by saying that it just jumps from party to 20 second possession to the end. You might have wanted to work on those things.
Yeah the whole 'head up a**' insult is just silly. Why did you bother saying that at all?
Confusing stuff.
Seriously, you might want to drink some herbal tea or something.
And if i am being an 'annoying god fu*king cuntface' why dont u actually say what i did wrong, and how i could help it???
Well anyway... Just think out your storylines more.
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what? where the fu*k was a good complement?
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Post by Tommo.S »

Anyways...when u 2 r finished abusing each other i will add this comment in?

Well thanks for the script man. I skimmed through it, i dunno, not really my cuppa tea with the demon thing lol...but thas me, im the hippy type I like promoting 'happy things' lol but nah its pretty good. Sum1 would use it, certainly the younger filmmakers i reckon, although if i saw that film with kids acting in it...dunno if that'd work... :lol:

p.s: wait is this message ok? it doesnt have any bad language in it?! :P
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what? where the fu*k was a good complement?
I didnt say complement, i said 'comment' and that was as follows:
thankyou for putting it on the site.
Calm down, i know that u have problems, but we can work around them.
IM JOKING CHILL!!!!!!!
That comment wasn't even that bad, its like 'i wouldnt use it, but someone else might' then you have a massive psych at me:
fu*king shithead, your so damn busy trying to p** everybody off and trying to insult everyone that your completely un-aware that your head is stuck so god-damn fu*king far up your a**.
Anyway, go bleed on the paper and right my name there, i dont care.
please do not go thinking that im suddenly saying this because your said something i thought of was cr**, ive pretty much always fu*king thought this because of your whole fu*king attitude.
Um... right. You have always thought of me as the 'god f*ckin cuntface'? Sure why not? Seing as i always looked at you as the 11 year old with too much time on his hands, but then i remind myself that ur older than me.
Its not because your 'short' but because you always over-react over cr** like this. Like while i was over there, u had at leasted 2-3 spaz's. Not at me, but at taylor mainly. You would purposely start a fight with him, then wonder why he gets angry. Then when u get told off u seem to make homocidal acts behind ur parents back, or you start to sook. And over the other tiny things, you would possibly go into your room, take out that note book, cut urself with the stanley knife and bleed on it.
I honestly think that you need to realise what your doing, or get some help. I mean yeah, i need help, but at leasted im not doing that.
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hey zac made that clone movie! that was good
www.freewebs.com/martinman300
no-budget film making.
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Yeah, it wasnt that bad, it just lacked emotion and some of the cuts were bad. Also, Jesse was a fairly lame actor.
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Zac, why dont you make a movie? (Hehe! im so repeditive) I know we were gonna make one when i was at your house, but i was way too tired. I wanna see your capabilities now. :) PLEASE! :) Dont worry about writing a script, just go out with an idea and film. Because you know, half the time you write a script, then loose your enthusiasm, like most people.
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This should really be called the bickering forum, grow up guys
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it just lacked emotion and some of the cuts were bad.
okay, ive cooled down now, but i just want to say this for like the bajillionth time.... "IT WAS MY FIRST FU*KING MOVIE! YOURS WERE ABSOLUTE SH*T TOO YOU DO REALISE!"
seriously i have said that so many times now im just trying to get it through your fricking head.
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Did i ever say that mine were any better? No.
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Post by naflish »

i like it when u use the pentegram..kinda gothic..
but thats just me... i think u can improve abit here n there in the script.
no use of war over some guy's first attempt at scripting.
chill out dude
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