The Discharge
By Robert Harbour
Basic Plot
There are two cops, Neil Davis and Miles Wells. They were driving around when they get a call. There is a robbery in progress at a local convenience store. The two cops both go. When they get there, the robbers are not armed, but Neil gets nervous and ends up shooting one of the robbers. The robbers ended up being brothers, Nick and Felix Bell. Nick is the one who gets shot. When Felix gets out of prison, he seeks revenge against Neil Davis. Felix gets convinced that instead of just killing him, he’ll kidnap his kid and torture her until Nick confronts him.
NOTE: LINES ARE JUST AN IDEA
GREEN TINT THROUGHOUT MOVIE
Scene 1
Opening Credits
(Slow music, maybe classical)
-shows ocean
-car is on scenic highway
-camera is filming out the window
Scene 2
-shot of a car passing by
-focuses on a coke can in the cup holder
-Neil picks it up and drinks it
-pans by his face and focuses on Miles
-focuses on radio on the dashboard
VOICE
(woman)
There is a robbery in progress at 3115 Brittany PL.
-close up of Neil
-Neil looks over at Miles
Scene 3
-shows foot stepping on the gas
-shows them driving by
-shows them (camera inside car)
MILES
Alright, is this your first robbery?
NEIL
Yeah.
MILES
Well then just stick behind me and watch.
SCENE 4
-car pulls up to convenience store
-shows someone running out of the store
-shows robbers
-shows the getaway car, running with driver chewing
Sunflower seeds
-camera focuses on the driver, then pans down to
To the ground below to the pile of chewed seeds
Collecting on the ground
FELIX
Just put the money in the bags!
-clerk fiddling to put the money in the sack
-Neil and Miles have their guns drawn
-shows a shot from outside the window looking
at the robbers
-Neil goes in and tries to resolve things
-Nick points at Miles and it kind of looks like
a pistol
-focuses on Neil’s eyes
-Neil sprints and shoots at Nick
-shows a bullet hole appear in the door
-shows shell falling to the ground
-Nick looks down and sees blood
-Nick then falls on his knees, then on his face
-focuses on Felix’s face, devastated
-shows Mile’s looking at Neil angrily
-Miles takes Neil outside
SCENE 5
MILES
What the hell are you doing?
NEIL
I thought he was going to shoot you.
MILES
Okay, we’ll just have to tell everyone that he was attacking us
-shows Felix getting handcuffed while he is just
Staring at Nick, dead
SCENE 6
-shows the Neil and Miles back at the house
MILES
I can’t believe you did that.
NEIL
I’m sorry, I just…
MILES
(interrupting)
Well the other robber only gets like five years.
FADES TO BLACK
FADES FROM BLACK
SCENE 7
CAPTION
Five years later
-shows the outside of a prison
-shows Felix walking outside
-Felix looks around, breathes in a deep breath,
and smirks
-shows different angles while Felix walks during his
Narration
FELIX
(Narrating)
Yes. Finally. After five years I am finally out. Five years. Five years taken from me. Just like the life that was taken from my brother, unjustly. I vow that I will kill the stupid bastard who killed my brother. Wait… the cop won’t really suffer if I just kill him. How about, I kidnap someone that’s close to him and torture them and mess with his head a little bit. Then, when he shows up, I kill him, and his close one.
-Felix then smirks
DISSOLVES TO SCENE 8
SCENE 8
-pans by pictures of Neil and his wife
-shows Neil’s wife’s tombstone
-shows Neil playing with his daughter, Julia
-close up on Neil’s face
-shot of the sky, fast forwarding from day to night
(the camera will film the sky with the sun setting,
Then the fast forward on premiere)
SCENE 9
-outside of the house (you can hear Neil talking)
-shows Neil tucking his daughter in
-Neil walks into his room
-gets into bed
-turns out the light
-camera pans by a clock, showing the time, then
Showing a shadow pass by in the window
-Felix walks through the open door
-close up of Julia sleeping, camera hovering over
Her face
-all of a sudden a hand goes over mouth forcefully
-she wakes trying to scream, but it is muffled by his
Hand
-car pulls away from the house
SCENE 10
-shot of outside of the house
-alarm goes off
-Neil wakes and starts walking to Julia’s room
-he walks in there
-stands by the door
NEIL
Honey, it’s time to wake up. Time for school.
-walks over to her bed
-camera now panning towards the bed
-Neil rips the sheets off the bed
-he finds a note in horror
-he starts to read it (in his mind)
-camera now panning all over the letter
FELIX
(narrating)
Hello, Detective Davis. If you are reading this you are probably aware that Julia is missing. But don’t worry, she’s doing fine. For now.
-Neil picks up a disturbing picture of his daughter
FELIX
(contd.)
Do you happen to remember the date of August 26, 2006? Does Nick Bell ring anything?
-Neil has a flashback
-black and white, high contrast
-hears a gunshot
-Nick falls to the ground
-close up of Neil’s face, sweating(out of flashback)
FELIX
(contd.)
Well he is, excuse me, was my brother. Detective Davis if you ever want to see your daughter again, then you will meet me at 500 E Gregory St in 48 hours. I’m watching you. If you are not alone I will kill you and your daughter on the spot.
-Neil then picks something up and throws it in anger.
SCENE 11
-pans into a dark room
-camera focuses on the foot of a chair
(front)
-starts panning up to the girl’s face, duck taped
And scared
-Felix comes in
-walks over to Julia
-puts his face right up to hers
FELIX
What the hell are you looking at?
JULIA
screaming
Mmmm!!Mmm!
(shes muffled by the duct tape)
-Felix kicks the chair over
FELIX
You can thank your father for this!
-walks out of the room
SCENE 12
-shows Neil going to bed
-he turns out the light
-camera over his head as he look up, teary
FADES TO BLACK
SCENE 13
FADES FROM BLACK
-shows Neil at his house
-hear a sound of a gun being cocked
SCENE 14
-Neil drives close to the house where Julia is
-he parks his car a few houses down
-he sneaks into the house
-looks around
-sees a hand laying in front of a doorway
-close up of his face with wide eyes
-presses a button on his walkie talkie
-runs in with his gun drawn
-checks his daughter
NEIL
Julia? Are you okay?
(shaking her)
JULIA
(out of it)
Huh? Uuum I’m fine dad.
-unravels Julia
-hears a noise coming from another room
NEIL
Okay, stay put.
JULIA
You got it.
-walks out of the room
-starts to check around the house
NEIL
(talking into walkie talkie)
Julia is secured.
-shows cars pulling up to the house
-shows sniper getting out to aim at a window
-Neil is still looking around the house
-he turns a corner
-a fist comes flying into his face
-he falls back
-Neil drops his gun
-shows sniper getting set
-aiming at the window
-Felix aims his gun at Neil
-Neil reaches for his gun, while laying on the ground
-Felix kicks it away
-Felix is again aiming his gun at Neil
FELIX
Finally. After five long years. I have been dreaming of this day since the second I saw my brother die. Prepare to do the same.
-shows Julia sitting there
-hears a gunshot
-her eyes light up
-focuses back on Felix’s face
-shows a bullet hole in the window
-a rifle shell laying outside next to the sniper
-shows smoke coming out of the rifle’s muzzle
-focuses on Felix’s face
-he looks down
-camera pans down from his face to his chest,
Revealing a bullet hole
-Felix drops his gun
-falls on his knees and collapses, dead
-Neil starts to walks out of there
-sniper leaves his post
-shows Felix opening his eyes
-aims his gun at Neil
-fires three times into Neil
-Julia comes in watching this
FELIX
(smirking)
Justice.
-focuses on Julia’s face, devastated
-shows Neil staring at Julia, Neil falls to the ground
-Felix then aims the gun at Julia
-tries to fire
-hears the clicking sound, its empty
-Julia, now crying, picks up Neil’s gun
-aims at Felix
JULIA
No. This is justice.
-shoots Felix
FADES TO BLACK
FADES RFOM BLACK
-shows Neil’s tombstone
-shows (from a different angle) Julia putting flowers down next to the tombstone
-close up on flowers
FADES TO BLACK
THE END
