Need opinions on a script

foxwood · Post by **foxwood** » Wed Dec 17, 2003 6:58 pm

I'm working on the final stages of a script to film next semester, and i don't know I have mixed feelings about it, and can't seem to pin down what is making me feel weird about it, prehaps you guys can help, and ideas or opinions would be nice. This is for startes a comday not an action flick, and as a word of warning if you oposed to strong laguage and the like I wouldn't read it. http://www.foxwoodent.com/movies/script ... 20site.pdf

ChibiVader · Post by **ChibiVader** » Wed Dec 17, 2003 9:18 pm

I'm getting one of those "Cannot find server" errors.

TimXL1 · Post by **TimXL1** » Thu Dec 18, 2003 12:19 am

Me too

foxwood · Post by **foxwood** » Thu Dec 18, 2003 2:13 am

http://68.57.123.32/movies/scripts/at%2 ... 20site.pdf try that, i just found out that the surver is down in a capasity, my bad, nodody was home to tell me earlyer today.

Epsilon · Post by **Epsilon** » Thu Dec 18, 2003 8:24 am

I read the whole thing... I didn't find that much of it funny, seems more like a love drama. His quote at the top of the stairwell is great!

I would try to think of more humor to be involved in it. For example, you could have a scene where Ryan is talking to Jack, and Jack is talking about his relationship with Mary, however Ryan thinks he is talking about Halo, and it goes on. Just an idea, I would just keep trying things. I like it. A little crude humored, but still a good story to work with.

How did you formulate the characters' names?

foxwood · Post by **foxwood** » Thu Dec 18, 2003 4:25 pm

I'll give your idea a try, I came up with the charaters names, by eather useing real peoples names, like my first name, rich or friends names.

Epsilon · Post by **Epsilon** » Fri Dec 19, 2003 6:39 am

That's what I thought, but I thought I'd ask.

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