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I posted this awhile ago but have decided to do so again because it is well an interesting read and I am not to scared of people ripping it off since it is copywritten. And another thing about it is that everylast thing in this film relates to either my game or the "Big Blind Metal" that is being written and will be way out of any of our leagus so far.

I will tell you this the script is intended as more of a guideline to the actual film other then perfection many scenes are left out that we will still shoot it's just how I function as a filmmaker.

BLIND METAL
By Solomon Croud
©September 2003

Blind Metal Specs. Color standard (Yellow, Black, Red)...

INT. COFFEE SHOP NIGHT
Cut in straight, a man at a table. he sit’s there with notebooks ready and a coffee to the left hand side. He bites onto his pen and moves a pack of cig’s farther away from him, checking his watch.
YOUNG MAN
Late Again.

Another man walks into the shop and orders a pop, sits down across the table from the man, drinks a bit then leans over a bit grabs his smokes and lights one up.
OTHER MAN
(TO YOUNG MAN)
I think we have something here.

Young man
(looking up to other man)
What is it this time Gregg.
Young man looks back down,
GREGG
(To Young Man)
Our trip out of here, a huge payoff

Young man
(looking down)
How much and who.

Gregg
(looking up)
A man named KRONIK, he is a legend
CUT:TO EXT/Woods or dirt road
Show feet walking down the road tracking it.
You can here him from a mile away.
Pan up a bit to show his torso the metal is heavy and CLANKS with every movement he makes.
He wields two guns on his dress.


Young man
(to Gregg)
His Dress?

Gregg
(laughing to him)
Yes his dress,
Camera is now tracking Kronik from the side from neck down.
Like I said two guns
Show one side of the guns, the double barreled pistol wood stock, his right hand starts to caress it.
The right side is a weird gun never seen by man

Young man
(laughing)
Like what?

Gregg
(leaning closer to him)
A double barreled, muzzle loading hand cannon.
Kronik has now stopped and is standing in a showdown aspect, from his back is a silhouette(?) in front of him are 5 people rifles in hand.
They say he is a master of reloading
Swoop to the other party. pan accros the 5 men then side view. He is primed for drawing his weapons.
those are usually one shot guns...
Show a fast draw of only the hand cannon. the left hand holds the other weapon (A automatic handgun).
But he can unload 6 shots in such speed.
Show semi fast shooting from behind, one of the enemies gets a shot out and hits him in the shoulder. But all men fall dead a pool of blood is around them.
That by the time you draw you are already dead.
Back to original INT for awhile
Young Man
(looking at him in disbelief)
Bullshit, a quick draw muzzle loading gunman?


Gregg
(sits back)
Either way you haven't heard the full story

Young man
(sits back)
I don’t want to I just need to know the reward.

Gregg
(stands up)
250 grand, but you don’t know half the story kid.

Young man
(stay’s sitting)
My names ROMEO not kid.

Gregg
(looks at Romeo)
Well let me tell you the rest.
Back To EXT/Kronik lights a cig and walks to the dead men, one is still alive.
The real thing is he will purposely leave one person alive.
Kronik offers the half dead man a cig, then grabs him by the collar.
Then orders that last person to tell his story. All people find it hard to believe.
Finally able to see his Face.
He is already dead, A wired face, And no eye’s...
Track Kronik from the front walking and smoking his cig, Cut to the gun holsters he quickly places them in there resting places.

Romeo
(looks up in amazement laughing)
Your f*** with me right?
Gregg starts to leave.
Right?, hey come back... s***...
FADE TO BLACK.

TITLE, BLIND METAL

INT/Kronik's Haunt...

Kronik is sitting down on a chair writing something, he has both his guns laid out on the table in front of him. He is interrupted by somebody.
Kronik looks over at the sound.
A tough looking girl comes in, The camera follows her.
KRONIK
(looking at her)
Whats my popularity today CHERYL?

Cheryl
(sitting down)
Well last time I checked 250,000

Kronik
(spinning his Auto)
s***, this might be one interesting day.

Cheryl
(reaching for the spinning auto)
Maybe you should lay low today.

Kronik
(ripping the gun out of her hand)
You should be more careful with loaded weapons.
He stands up and puts the weapons in the holsters, walks to the window of the decayed building.
I can’t lay low. Everyday could be the time I find it.
He turns around and attaches some ammo to his belt.
See, she is dead, and so was I.

Cheryl
(looks at him)
I can see that, but we know why.

Kronik
(looks down at her)
I know but my first kill after I was revived was so...
Perfect, just wonderful.
He moves closer to her.
To tell the truth I have no clue why I am alive, but these f*** people continue the theory of killing me.

Cheryl
(stands up and looks at him)
Well around here you are the monster, the freak the outlaw.

Kronik
(Laughing)
But why me, I have done nothing wrong. And why do you stay around me?

Cheryl
(Walks away)
I don’t know, maybe I was sent here to help you.

Kronik
(smiling now)
You, help me? I saved your a**, and what? you give me a place to hide sure that fine. But-

Cheryl
(turns around at the door)
How many times have you been shot dead boy?

Kronik
(perplexed)
25-50 times?

Cheryl
(opening the door)
Well that is alot, anyway maybe you can get her back tomorrow you are a man who has nothing and is worth alot.
She walks out the door, pan to the writing on the paper.
The truth of death is an illusion,
To bring her back I must find
that one thing, The Ring.
Close up pan to the ring on Kronik's finger.


EXT/A bench by a river. Dawn

Romeo and Gregg are sitting fairly close, Romeo seems ready to leave but know’s he has to stay. Gregg smokes another cig and turns to him.
Gregg
(facing Romeo)
I can’t help you on this ok.

Romeo
(Confused)
What? We always work on these together.

Gregg
I am getting out of this business, I’ve done research on this guy.

Romeo
(He gets up)
Why? this is our last bounty, you can’t just quit.

Gregg
Shut up, ok AMY is perfect for this, and I just am not skilled enough.

Romeo
Amy?
(no answer)
....Why the hell do I have to do this? huh!

Gregg
That ring...

Romeo
(looks at his hand)
This?
Gregg
(looks up)
yeah, that I’ve talked to survivors and that is a perfect description of what he is searching for. You hold the key to his rebirth.
Gregg gets up and looks down at Romeo. Breaths a bit.
That is why, the legend is that only the person that has touched the ring after his death can even have a chance of killing him.

Romeo
(is now scared)
But it was just on the ground near that accident, I thought it was a charm or something.

Gregg
you screwed up buddy here is amy’s number
(begins to walk away)
you screwed up...

Cut To EXT/an abandoned street.

Kronik is walking down a path and know’s where he is going every step seems pre mediated and he just blankly stares down the horizon. CHA HA an ammo clip fell from his belt he did not notice.
A child 8-10 perhaps picks it up and runs to Kronik.
The child taps his side and waits.

Kronik turns around fast gun’s drawn and see’s the kid...

Child
(afraid looking up at Kronik)
You dropped this
Kronik Kneels down to get to level with the child. He puts his guns away and grabs the clip.
Kronik
(looking at the kid straight)
You are strong aren't you? Not running from me.

Child
(backs away a bit)
You look scary but you are not...

Kronik
nice to hear that
GUNSHOTS the ground becomes riddled with bullets, Kronik quickly shields the child from the gun fire getting shot 10 times in the process, he is stunned severely they both stagger to a nearby tree.
Child
You ok mister?
GUNSHOTS
Kronik
yeah I will be, what are you doing out here?

Child
My father kicked me out of the house.

Kronik
I guess we are both a little bit of outcasts here enit?

Child
Why are they shooting?

Kronik
Well people around here don’t like me much
GUNSHOTS
Listen kid, I have to rest a bit here
Can you do me a favor and see how many men are out there?

Child
Sure
the child moves around the tree to look the ground has tiny explosions,
Kronik
No not like that use this

Child
A mirror?

Kronik
yeah...
The kid uses the mirror and begins counting... Kronik meanwhile starts to stand up.
Child
There is about 25

Kronik
25? wonderful.
Ok kid do me a favor, walk behind me, then when I say run.

Child
ok.

They begin moving sideways to another tree, Kronik is hit a few more times but takes out 5 people with the automatic. They reach the last large tree
Kronik
RUN!!!
The kid runs fast away as Kronik walks stoically to the original path, shooting while walking in a line formation, 6 shots out of the cannon, many shots out of the auto.
GUNSHOTS.
10 more of the gunmen are hit
Kronik
That leaves about 10 left.
behind the tree he reloads the ground is constantly riddled with bullets. He walks up the incline cannon in hand, a gunman pops up and is shot in the head, a second pops up, straight in the chest.
DEATH SCREAMS ALL OVER
Now in a complete line with the other gunman.
Another pops out as the camera circles the two opposing gunman once. Kronik jumps above him and aims down
Say hello to Jesse
BAM Camera Shoot
We watch the 7 other shooters run, he picks out 4 of them in the back. And finally everything is calm, he walks to the 4 runners and see’s a familiar face
Kronik
(p*** off)
Cheryl... Damnit f*** backstabbers.

Fade To Black

INT/Kronik’s Haunt

Kronik is spraying gas all over the place of the area mumbling profanities, he sets it so it would explode the small house. Starts a fire on a price of cloth, walks out with his equipment in hand.

EXT/outside Kronik’s Haunt

Kronik walks stoically away from the building. BOOM the explosion occurs and Kronik is now out of the frame.

Cut:To

INT/Romeo’s House

After meeting Amy romeo and her are now in mid planning of Kronik’s Execution.
Romeo
(drinking a cup of water)
How good of a shot are you?

Amy
(staring back in confidence)
Better then you...

Romeo
(sitting down)
I must admit I don’t use guns

Amy
(now confused)
Then what do you use?

Romeo
(reaching into his coat standing up)
This!!!
He pulls out a full length Katana, whips it around a bit and then puts it back in his sheath.
Amy
(now laughing)
A sword idiot this guy will shoot you 100 times before you get close enough

Romeo
(Thinking)
That’s where you come in.

Amy
Oh really?

Romeo
What type of gun do you have?

Amy
you want to see?
Amy stands up and walks to the door,
CUT TO:
Amy’s shack. She opens a closet door exposing a malicious weapon.
Amy
(picks up the gun with ease)
It’s an AK47 moron.
Romeo is in complete awe of the amazing weapon, hint of drool.

Romeo
(now ok)
Good, that good...

Amy
so when are we going to play?

Romeo
Well maybe tomorrow.
CUT/INT/Kronik's Car
Kronik sits in the drivers seat staring blankly.
EXT/Road
Pan with vehicle.
Cut
Track Vehicle from the front hopefully showing the dirt clouds emitting from the tires.
GUNSHOTS
Stationary Cam. Quick braking, maybe a slight turn.
Kronik gets out of the car and looks around, camera rotates a bit to the back of his head.
out of car view showing Kronik walking forward guns being touched.
GUNSHOTS
The ground explodes with bullets and Kronik is hit in the head. Falls down and hides behind the vehicle.
SILENCE
Kronik breaths hard, And looks up.
More GUNSHOTS and DINGS and RECOILS

Cut:To Romeo and Amy
Romeo
(ducking)
Damnit why won’t he die?

Amy
(looking at him)
I hit him in the damn head!

Romeo
I think I have to shoot him
He reaches for the gun and grabs it out of her hands.
How do you shoot this thing

Amy
Point And pull the trigger
CHA CHA BING BAM
bullets hit all the ground 15 feet away
Kronik
(stands up yelling)
You showed me enit! Try Again!!
CLICK CLICK
Romeo
What?

Amy
Your out of ammo honey.

Romeo
I knew that... cover me...
Romeo stands up and wields his sword twisting it around a bit.
Kronik does the same walking in his straight line fashion drawing the hand cannon.

They reach each other gun to head sword up in a final slash position.
Cla Chink
Amy Reloads the AK47,
BAM she is shot in the chest she collapses and Romeo makes a final slice.
SWOOSH near miss Kronik is now in the car drives of and shoots with the automatic, A bullet hits romeo in the left arm. and Kronik is now gone.
Another shot of Kronik in the drivers seat smoking
FADE:TO Black

INT/Romeo’s House

Romeo now has his arm in a self made bandage. He is now confused on what he is going to do now. Romeo walks to a nearby phone and picks up the receiver.
CLICK
DIAL

Phone Answer
Hello?

Romeo
Hey Gregg.

Gregg
Yo what’s up?

Romeo
Amy died...

Gregg
she died... s***, well that the threat in this world. I should tell her boyfriend then...

Romeo
You do that then

Gregg
Hold on someones at the door.
Cut:To INT/Greggs house.
Gregg on a portable phone in a beater,walks to the door. Opens it revealing Amy, bloody as hell. She cauterized her own wound after pulling out the bullet.
Did you just leave her to die?

Romeo
No! She looked dead. So I left.

Gregg
ok nob get your a** over here.

Romeo
Why?

Gregg
We are going to do this right.
CLICK Gregg hangs up the phone and walks to Amy.
She is laying on the couch breathing very heavily.
I’ll get you some water ok...

Amy
o..k.. tha..nk..s
he goes and gets the water quickly, Amy sits up and drinks it extremely fast.
You said that f*** was strong

Gregg
of course I did, did you hit him?

Amy
(looking into the ceiling)
Yeah in the head. It Really slowed him down.

Gregg
Really?

Amy
But the damn bastard wasted most of my ammo.
She stands up
That Kronik f*** is good, He heard me reload.

Gregg
Really, do you think he can see?

Amy
Yes, you can see it in is face, in the sockets.

Gregg
who do you know that can help?

Amy
ROBERTA, and BILLY.
She writes the number down. and passes it to Gregg.
They alone are like an army.

Gregg
well I heard he killed 21 in one fight.

Amy
They are enough...
cut:to
EXT/Payphone
Kronik is at a payphone a man comes behind him with a knife
BAM, man collapses.
Kronik begins to dial a number.
Kronik
comon answer FIDO.
BAM another assualter is shot and dead.
I know your home
RINGNING, Kronik turns around gun at his head,

Fido
Hello?
kronik ducks and shoots the man through the back.

Kronik
Yo sorry about the noise. This is Angel bud.

Fido
Huh? I though you died.

Kronik
You don’t get out much do you...
BAM BAM two other people shoot kronik he whips around and takes them out.
See I’m having some social problems.

Fido
And?

Kronik
Well need a place to stay you still live there?

Fido
Yah, but I heard you died.

Kronik
I know... it was a witness protection thing...

Fido
Ok..

Kronik
Thanks I’ll be right over.

CUT:TO

Gregg, Amy and Romeo are in the greggs house. No speaking just show them Billy comes in first with a suitcase, opens it up and reveals 2 old tommy gun’s. Cut some more, Roberta finnaly makes it, with a duffle bag, slides out a blanket and folds it out, 2 guns that defie conventional usage.

The trigger on one is on the top and has a handle, the barral is a foot long and the gun itself is 2 feet. See slides a cylinder into the back CHA CLICK a weird ammo clip.

The other one is made to mount on her left arm and the trigger hugs the hand, it fires three slugs out of the three barrals at one time and is loaded in a swift arm thrust.
They all nod at each other and walk out the door, then into the car.

CUT:TO
Kronik walks to Fido’s from his car. holding a bag.
KNOCK KNOCK
Door opens s*** - BAM fido shoots kronik in the left shoulder.

Kronik
The Hell it’s me Angel.

Fido
No your that kronik guy.

Kronik
Shutup, let me in.

Fido
Prove your angel

Kronik
The ring, my face.

Fido.
Fine sorry about the bullet you feel pain?

Kronik
Yah I aint the f*** crow!!
Kronik walks in finnally, he gets a coke out of the fridge
Yo, I need some help

Fido
What type?


Kronik
I need to get her ring back.

Fido
Yah?

Kronik.
But, this will involve some shooting.

Fido
Sure, so did you die?

Kronik
yah,

Fido
Weird-

Kronik
Shutup, is christina still around.

Fido
yah, but see went off with some guy.

Kronik
you know were she lives?

Fido
Zodiak...
Kronik moves a bit and throws the can of pop, yelling and swearing for some reason he moves to fido and grabs his collar.
Kronik
LISTEN TO ME!!!

Fido
huh?.

Kronik
I HAVE BEEN HIT BY HUNDREDS OF BULLETS, PEOPLE HATE ME!!! ALL I AM ASKING IS TO GET CHRISTINA DOWN HERE!!!

Fido
(scared)
Why? you have killed so many, why do you need help?

Kronik
I AINT LETTING THAT BASTARD GET AWAY AGAIN HE HAS MY WIFES RING THE ONLY THING THAT CAN BRING HER BACK
Fido moves a bit, kronik grabs him harder
NOW WE ARE GOING TO SURROUND HIM. CHRIS HAS THE BEST AIM AND HUGE GUNS!!! YOU ARE TACTICAL WE WILL THEN TAKE HIM OUT.

Fido
(trying to breath)
fiiinne...
Kronik lets go and fido falls to the ground.
I’ll call her, damnit.

Fade to black.
Kronik scene, He gets dressed in some final fighting wares, He pulls his hair in a ponytail, hat, tight black jeans, holsters and a funny NDN shirt.
CUT:TO FINAL BATTLE AREA...
Kronik and his team of 3 drive on a dirt road, STOP. They get out and gear up, They look at each other and rest against the car. the weapons are yet to be revealed.
SKREECH, a van stops straight ahead of Kroniks gang (Demented Smirk emits from kroniks face). Romeos gang comes out silence is abrupted, gunshots ensue after the back door of the van is shut.
They fight in weird formations, Billy keeps shooting
one gun is out he throw’s it, now walking towards kronik he is shot by the automatic and dies but gets alot of shots off in kronik’s torso.
Fido hides behind the car, he opens the rear door and pulls out a rocket launcher of all things.
SWOOSH the rocket comes out of the tube and hits the van BOOM it explodes into peices.
Everyone scatters away from the blast, Fido tries to reload to get a kill shot, but amy runs around the car and riddles him with bullets... behind her is christina, see has the gun against amy’s head.......BAM....she is down for good.
Kronik closes in on romeo, SLASH hit in the leg. Bam romeo is shot in the arm again. CHA CHA CHING Roberta unloads many shots off and hits kronik, CHA CLICK triple barrel is now read BAAAMMM, miss!. CHA CHA BAM she barrages kronik with many shots each one misses except for the last few that hit him in the head, he is stunned alot.
Christina opens the trunk of kroniks car, Flame thrower revealed
FHOOOMMM she turns roberta into a human barbecue, she is out of fuel after watching roberta die, BAM she is shot straight in the back by gregg who reveals himself out of the mess.
BAM BAM his gun fires in a sweeping attack, ground is filled with holes and kronik is now extremly shot up, blood out of his mouth, Gregg starts to walk closer.
BAM BAM BAM BAM BAM the double barral screams bullets towards gregg he collapses in a pool of blood. He see’s romeo infront of him CHI CHI CHA the automatic misses romeo by inches. Romeo is running towards kronik for the kill, SWOOSH just missing him by hairs, kronik finds his way to the car sits back. CLICK CLICK automatic is out of ammo, no more ammo clips. kronik reloads the handcannon. they both stare at each other. Gun drawn romeo runs aqain flailin the sword SLICE!, He hits kroniks gun shortening the barral.
Romeo
hell!

Kronik
(head turned like a curious dog)
Too Bad Enit?

BAM a huge fireball and cloud of smoke emits, romeo flies back gaping hole in his chest the fight is now over.
Kronik walks towards romeo’s dead body rips the ring off his neckless, throw’s fido off his car and drives into the sunset...
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Romeo sits up and starts to walk away,
CUT:TO
GUNSHOTS he is now being shot at
YELLING REDNECK
get out of here FREAK!!!
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Post by Super Chicken »

whoa. i started reading it and ran out of time. Once i get more time ill finish it off. so far so good methinks.:)
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Post by Epsilon »

Hmm... oh I've read this one before the last time you posted it.
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Post by Reiji »

Sounds good. Your scriptwriting technique/layout needs some tweaking mind. But maybe that's just the way it looks on the board.
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