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visions of sin

Post by elstongunn » Wed Jul 25, 2007 11:44 am

Visions of Sin

A boy is given the power to see the sin people have committed and will commit in the future by touching them. However, instead of saving people of their sins he chooses to kill himself to save himself the grief of seeing all the bad in the world.

this is a plot outline for a movie i have to do at school about a social issue
does anyone think its got pottential or has it been done?
any comments would be greatly appreciated
thanks

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Post by film fanatic » Wed Jul 25, 2007 12:00 pm

It sounds a bit like Unbreakable. It definitely has potential, but perhaps he could see the sins in a different manner than touching them? Maybe just with eye contact. Imagine not being able to look in to people's eyes without seeing their sins? That would drive him to suicide.

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Post by britishbulldog » Wed Jul 25, 2007 2:23 pm

I'm pretty sure the hench black man in the green mile followed a similar path but he decided to be executed so he didnt really commit suicide but still its pretty much the same thing!

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Post by foxwood » Wed Jul 25, 2007 3:41 pm

so does he try and help anybody before he desided to end it all, or do we get to see the resulits of it in the after life, can he see his own sins, and of course how long is this movie suposed to be?

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Post by elstongunn » Thu Jul 26, 2007 5:04 am

its supposed be a short film round about 4-6 mins
im thinking now more like he tells a close friend how awful it is to see everyones sins
but his friend tells him that its the greatest thing becuase he can save people from themselves and he can be a hero. but the hero cant stand it and tries to kill himself and when his friend realises this he tries to save him. but as he saves him the powers are somehow transfered between eachother and his friend gets the power. then he realises how bad it is. then we can see the heros sins

so whadya rekon

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Post by foxwood » Thu Jul 26, 2007 10:20 am

What I would do is start with the Hero(or first kid whatever) sitting just about to off himself, gun in mouth bathtub with a razor whatever, and then tell the story in flash back, and in the last sequence have him off himself then cut to credits or something like that.

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