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Post by youngfilmmaker » Fri Mar 30, 2007 9:31 pm

Thank you for your critism. Do you think if i can work hard enough i can pull this off? And if you were watching the film would you enjoy it?
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Post by kene555 » Fri Mar 30, 2007 9:34 pm

You will need to put lots of work to film this.

Already, you need locations for a home, another house, and a school.

You will need many, many actors.

You will either need to rent out several emergency vehicles, use 3D, or a combination.

You need a news van, or at least a plain van with a dish satellite attached to the top with a news logo on the side, painted on or by 3D/photoshop

You will need guns.

Use tripods, camera stabilizers, etc to make this great.

i would like to watch it when its done for sure.
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Post by youngfilmmaker » Fri Mar 30, 2007 9:43 pm

When i start this project, I will make make a blog and post BTS stuff and how the project is going.
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Post by youngfilmmaker » Fri Mar 30, 2007 10:10 pm

I first am going to talk to the police department and my school.

I need to convince my school b/c its a catholic private school and there are alot of swear words in this script.
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Post by kene555 » Fri Mar 30, 2007 11:18 pm

Heck yeah.

Good luck with that - my school is Catholic private too, so we couldn't have any swearing. No blood when we cut a teacher in half with a lightsaber too.

maybe you can film with the swear words, and censor them out for any copies seen by the school.
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Post by youngfilmmaker » Fri Mar 30, 2007 11:27 pm

Seems like a good idea. I will start planning by talking to the school first. =]


Do you think I can accomplish this film?
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Post by kene555 » Fri Mar 30, 2007 11:44 pm

What equipment do you have? This is what will often make a good film a great one.

Can you accomplish this film?

If you can answer yes to all these questions, then I feel that you can accomplish this film:

Can you...

1) get enough actors to film in a believable way (as in, not 3 cops and 5 people in the crowd -- more like 10 cops and a crowd of 25)

2) get people who can act believably to star in the film (I was lucky with the one I'm working on, no one has ever acted, but since there is no real dialogue yet, we can get away with it. For the scene with large amounts of speaking and memorization that I film Monday, I have gotten am actor from our thespian society to act for us)

3) Get enough realistic props --as in no BB guns or airsoft. At Dick's Sporting goods, $100 or so will get you a realistic airsoft with no orange on the front. It uses CO2, so the sound and recoil when firing nothing are realistic.

4) Get enough people to help film

5) Get permission to film at school and at 2 separate houses

6) Edit the film in a satisfactory way

7) Do you have enough equipment? You will need a few cameras, the ability to use the focus to your advantage, microphones, dollies, tripods, stabilizers, etc (these are helpful in making the film a step above amateur.

8 Get the unnecessary vehicles, or realistic 3D models you can incorporate.

Try to accomplish as much as you can on this list. The more of this you can do, the better the film will be.

Others, please comment as well for tips on filming this, getting permission, vehicles, equipment, etc.

youngfilmmaker, you should use copy and paste to put this script on here with your next post so others can read it and help you to improve it
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Post by youngfilmmaker » Sat Mar 31, 2007 12:06 am

Here is the script, I will finish this post later:

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PAYBACK

BLACK SCREEN.

THE FILM OPENS WITH THE SHOT OF THE OUTSIDE OF A HIGH SCHOOL. MIKE, MID TEENS, DARK HAIR, SCRUFFILY DRESSED, AND HUNCHED OVER ASSENDS THE STAIRCASE LEADING TO THE MAIN DOOR.

INSIDE THE SCHOOL CORRIDOR.

THE CAMERA FOLLOWS MIKE AS HE WALKS OVER TO HIS LOCKER. HE SLOWLY OPENS THE DOOR, INSIDE OF HIS LOCKER, ROTTEN EGGS HAVE BEEN SMEARED ALL OVER HIS BOOKS.

A GROUP OF THREE BOYS, JOHNNY, (BLONDE HAIRED TALL WELL DRESSED), PETE (DARK HAIRED, DARK CLOTHING), RAY (FAIR HAIR, BASEBALL JACKET) WALK UP BEHIND MIKE.


JOHNNY
What is that smell?

RAY
It smells like somethin’s gone off….
Man I feel like I’m gonna puke.

JOHNNY
Wait….I know what it is….
It’s……

ALL THREE BOYS TOGETHER: It’s Mikie!!!!!!!!!!

PETE
Didn’t your mother ever teach
You to wash!




JOHNNY
Pete you nob!
Mikie’s not got a mother,
She topped herself, six months
ago remember?

PETE
Oh yeh….I forgot.

RAY
LAUGHS

JOHNNY WALKS OVER TO MIKE AND TAKES HOLD OF HIM BY HIS JACKET.

JOHNNY
Maybe you should top yourself
Too?

MIKE
Let go of me.

PETE
So he has got a voice today!

THE BELL GOES.

JOHNNY
Better run along mikie, you
Don’t want to be late for class.

JOHNNY LETS GO OF MIKE AND PUSHES HIM AGAINST THE LOCKER.
HE SWIPES THE CONTENTS OF MIKE’S LOCKER ONTO THE FLOOR.
ALL THREE LAUGH. AND WALK DOWN THE CORRIDOR.

RAY
TURN’S BACK.
Hey Mike….see you at recess!

MIKE BENDS DOWN NEXT TO THE PILE OF BOOKS ON THE FLOOR. HE STARES AFTER THEM.

INSIDE A CLASS ROOM.

ALL THE STUDENTS ARE BUSY WRITING. THE CAMERA TRAVELS DOWN THE ROWS OF STUDENTS AND STOPS AT THE BACK OF THE CLASS.

MIKE IS SAT DRAWING. HE IS DRAWING A CARTOON OF A BOY DRESSED IN BLACK. HE IS ARMED WITH VARIOUS WEAPONS.

THE BELL GOES.

ALL OF THE STUDENTS PACK AWAY THEIR BELONGINGS AND LEAVE THE ROOM.

MIKE SLOWLY GETS UP. HE WALKS TO THE DOOR. JOHNNY, PETE AND RAY ARE STOOD TALKING WITH A GROUP OF BOYS.

MIKE SLIPS OUT OF THE ROOM AND RUNS DOWN THE CORRIDOR.

IN THE SCHOOL LIBRARY.

MIKE IS SAT HIDDEN AWAY BEHIND A ROW OF BOOKSHELVES, HE IS BUSY DRAWING IN A SKETCH BOOK . HIS FRIEND KAI, LONG HAIR, SKATER STYLE CLOTHES, WALKS UP TO HIM.

KAI
Hey, I’ve been looking all over for
You.

MIKE
LOOKS UP
What’s up?



KAI
I was told to give you this.
HANDS MIKE A PIECE OF PAPER

MIKE
What is it?

KAI
SHRUGGS.

MIKE
OPENS THE PAPER AND READS IT .

KAI
Well?

MIKE
It’s that girl…Katie,
She wants me to meet her.

KAI
Katie Fisher….You do
Know who she hangs out
With right…. Johnny Miller!

MIKE
…..s***!

KAI
So what are you going to do?

MIKE
SHRUGGS.
CONTINUES DRAWING.

KAI
If you want my advice….
I’d say go for it…..You only
Live once right?


MIKE
Maybe.

KAI WALKS ROUND AND LOOKS AT MIKE’S DRAWING. IT IS OF HIM SHOOTING JOHNNY.

KAI
He’s still giving you s*** isn’t he?.


MIKE NODS HE PACKS UP HIS SKETCH BOOK AND STANDS UP.

MIKE
I’ll catch you later.

HE WALKS PAST KAI AND LEAVES THE LIBRARY.

LATE AFTERNOON.

MIKE IS WALKING DOWN A RESIDENTIAL ROAD. HE WALKS PAST A ROW OF RUN DOWN HOUSES.

HE TURNS THE CORNER AND WALKS DOWN A NARROW ALLEYWAY. HE IS CONFRONTED BY JOHNNY, PETE AND RAY.

JOHNNY
Hey Mike we missed you at recess.

MIKE
Look I don’t want any more trouble

MIKE TRIES TO SIDE STEP JOHNNY, BUT PETE AND RAY BLOCK HIS WAY.

JOHNNY
Oh But I do!

PETE REACHES OUT AND GRABS HOLD OF MIKE’S SCHOOL BAG. HE RIFLES THROUGH IT AND FINDS MIKE’S SKETCH BOOK.
HE OPENS IT AND STARTS FLICKING THROUGH THE PAGES.


PETE
TO JOHNNY
Hey look what I’ve got here.

JOHNNY TAKES THE SKETCH BOOK FROM PETE, HE LOOKS THROUGH IT.

JOHNNY
TO MIKE
So you think you’re an artist hu?

MIKE
Please, just give it back.

JOHNNY POINTS TO THE DRAWING OF MIKE SHOOTING HIM

JOHNNY
Is that supposed to be me?
HE MOVES CLOSER TO MIKE.
Is that what you want to do to me?

MIKE
Please…….

JOHNNY
LAUGHS.
You don’t have the guts.

JOHNNY RIPS THE DRAWING OUT OF THE SKETCH BOOK, AND TEARS IT IN HALF. HE DOES THE SAME WITH THE OTHER SKETCHES AND THROWS THEM ON THE GROUND.

MIKE BENDS DOWN AND STARTS TO PICK UP THE DRAWINGS.

JOHNNY
Like I said…you’re a spineless
Little s***.
HE KICKS MIKE IN THE RIBS.

MIKE CRIES OUT, AND SLUMPS OVER.
PETE AND RAY JOIN IN AND START KICKING MIKE.
JOHNNY WITHDRAWS AND WATCHES THEM.

MIKE
What… have I ever done to you?
……please .……stop…… .

JOHNNY
LAUGHS.

PETE AND RAY WITHDRAW, LEAVING MIKE DAZED ON THE GROUND.

JOHNNY GOES THROUGH MIKE’S SCHOOL BAG. HE TAKES OUT A WALLET AND OPENS IT. HE TAKES OUT THE MONEY AND THROWS THE WALLET AT MIKE.

JOHNNY
TO RAY AND PETE
Come on we’ve gotta split.
TO MIKE.
We’ll see you tomorrow…..
Lets go.


MIKE WATCHES AS JOHNNY, PETE AND RAY SAUNTER DOWN THE ALLEYWAY.

MIKE SLOWLY PULLS HIMSELF UP. HE PICKS UP HIS BELONGINGS AND SLOWLY WALKS DOWN THE ALLEYWAY. HE STOPS OUTSIDE OF HIS HOUSE, WHICH IS SHABBY AND RUN DOWN.

HE SLOWLY OPENS THE DOOR AND GOES INSIDE, CLOSING THE DOOR BEHIND HIMSELF.

NIGHT TIME

MIKE’S BEDROOM.


MIKE IS SAT ON THE FLOOR. HIS TORN SKETCH BOOK IS ON THE FLOOR NEXT TO HIM.

MIKE IS STARING BLANKLY AT THE TV.

IN THE BACKGROUND, SHOUTING CAN BE HEARD.

MIKE TURNS THE TV’S VOLUME UP LOUDER. HE REACHES INTO HIS POCKET AND TAKES OUT THE NOTE FROM KATIE. HE READS IT THROUGH AGAIN.

HE REACHES OUT FOR HIS PHONE AND DIALS.


OUTSIDE OF A BOWLING ALLEY

PETE, RAY AND JOHNNY (WITH HIS ARMS AROUND KATIE, DARK HAIRED, PETITE) ARE STOOD LEANING UP AGAINST JOHNNY’S CAR TALKING.

KATIE’S MOBILE PHONE RINGS.

JOHNNY
Who the hells that?

KATIE BREAKS HIS HOLD AND WALKS A SHORT DISTANCE AWAY.

KATIE
Hello…?

MIKE
(PAUSES)
Hi Katie? It’s Mike.

KATIE
Look Mike….I can’t talk
Right now….

MIKE
But I got your message….

KATIE
Meet me after school tomorrow
By the side gate…we’ll talk then ok?

MIKE
Sure.

OUTSIDE OF THE BOWLING ALLEY.

JOHNNY WALKS UP TO KATIE.

JOHNNY
Who was that?

KATIE
No one.

JOHNNY SNATCHES THE PHONE FROM KATIE.

JOHNNY
So you are going to do it
For me after all…..

KATIE
Look Johnny I don’t
feel right about doing this.

JOHNNY
Well that’s too bad
Isn’t it.

HE PUTS HIS HAND UP TO KATIE’S THROAT AND SQUEEZES IT.


JOHNNY
You know what will happen
To you if you don’t.



MIKE’S BEDROOM.

THE DOOR BURSTS OPEN. MIKE’S FATHER STORMS IN, WITH A BOTTLE OF BEER IN HIS HAND.

FATHER
What you doin’ in here….
You lazy good for nothin’

MIKE TRIES TO RUN TO THE DOOR BUT HIS FATHER TAKES HOLD OF HIM AND SLAMS HIM UP AGAINST THE WALL.

FATHER
You’re a waste of space
You know that?

MIKE
(WEAKLY) Yes

FATHER
(SARCASTICALLY)
Yes….yes (YELLING) Yes.

HE PUNCHES THE WALL NEXT TO MIKE’S HEAD.

MIKE SHAKES UNCONTROLLABLY AND SLUMPS TO THE FLOOR.

HIS FATHER STAGGERS OUT OF THE ROOM.

MIKE STARES AFTER HIM.

AT SCHOOL.

THE FOLLOWING DAY.

MIKE IS STOOD WAITING AT THE SIDE GATE, HE HAS GOT A BLACK EYE FROM YESTERDAY.
HE NERVOUSLY LOOKS AT HIS WATCH.

KATE WALKS ROUND THE CORNER AND STOPS INFRONT OF MIKE.

KATIE
I’m sorry about last night…God Mike
What’s happened to you?

MIKE
It’s nothing. Does Johnny know
you’re here?

KATIE
Johnny and I aren’t…well
I’m not seeing him anymore.

MIKE
You’ve finally seen sense.

KATIE
(SMILES)
Anyway I was wondering…
are you doing anything
Saturday night?

MIKE
Nothing special Why?

KATIE
I’m having a party Saturday,
and I was wondering
If you would like to come.
It’s nothing fancy, just hanging
out and having fun.

MIKE
(CAUTIOUSLY)
He won’t be there will he?


KATIE
I told you Johnny
and I have split up.
So are you coming or what?

MIKE
(SMILES)
Sure, I’d like that.


KATIE
Great!


SHE GETS OUT A PIECE OF PAPER AND WRITES DOWN HER ADDRESS.

KATIE
About 7.30 If that’s
ok?

MIKE
Yeh sure.

KATIE TURNS AND WALKS WAY FROM MIKE. SHE TURNS THE CORNER AND SLOWLY WALKS ACROSS THE SPORTS FIELD. JOHNNY MEETS HER HALF WAY.

JOHNNY.
All set?

KATIE
(NODS)

JOHNNY
That’s my girl

HE PUTS HIS ARM AROUND KATIE AND THEY WALK AWAY.


THE NEXT DAY.

IN THE SCHOOL LIBRARY.

MIKE IS SAT DRAWING A PORTRAIT OF KATIE ON A PIECE OF PAPER. KAI WALKS UP TO HIM AND LOOKS OVER HIS SHOULDER.

KAI
Good likeness.

MIKE CONTINUES DRAWING.

MIKE
Katie’s invited me to a party
Saturday night and I’m gonna
go.


KAI
What!.
Man are you sure about this?
I know I told you to go for it….
But, Mike I just foolin’ with you.
I never thought……

MIKE
Thought what? That she could
ever like me?

KAI
No I didn’t mean that.
Why do you think
she’s really inviting you
Mike?
Your unpaid
entertainment.
She doesn’t give a s*** about you.

MIKE GET UP AND PICKS UP HIS SKETCH BOOK.


MIKE
Your just jealous…..
Because your not invited.

KAI
Mike I don’t give a s***
About a stupid invite.
I just don’t trust
Her Mike and you shouldn’t
either.

MIKE
It’s ok, she told me she’s
not seeing Johnny anymore.

KAI
Really? That’s funny, seeing as
I saw them together this morning.

MIKE
Your just trying to ruin this
For me.
Well its not going to
Work Kai.
Screw you!


MIKE STORMS OUT OF THE LIBRARY.

KAI WATCHES HIM GO.

MIKE’S HOUSE

EVENING.

THE CAMERA SHOOTS THROUGH THE FRONT ROOM WINDOW.

MIKES FATHER IS DRUNK AND IS SHOUTING AT MIKE. HE PICKS UP A BEER BOTTLE AND THROWS IT AT MIKE‘S HEAD.

MIKE DODGES THE BOTTLE, HE RUNS TO THE OPEN DOOR. HE RUNS OUT AND SLAMS THE DOOR SHUT BEHIND HIMSELF.

IN THE BATHROOM

MIKE HAS PLACED THE SKETCH OF KATIE OVER THE SINK.

HE OPENS THE MEDICINE CABINET. HE TAKES OUT A RAZOR BLADE.

MIKE
LOOKING AT HIS DRAWING
Sweet Katie.

MIKE CUTS KATIE’S NAME INTO THE FLESH OF HIS FOREARM.
HIS BLOOD SPLATTERS KATIE’S PORTRAIT.

MIKE LOOKS UP AT HIS OWN REFLECTION IN THE MIRROR.

SATURDAY

MIKE’S BEDROOM.

MIKE’S BED IS COVERED IN DRAWINGS OF KATIE. HE SCANS ALL THE DRAWINGS BEFORE PICKING ONE. HE CAREFULLY ROLLS IT UP AND TIES A PIECE OF RIBBON AROUND IT.

SATURDAY NIGHT 7.30

MIKE WALKS UP TO KATIE’S HOUSE. HE IS HOLDING THE DRAWING. HE STOPS OUTSIDE OF THE FRONT DOOR AND RINGS THE BELL.

KATIE ANSWERS THE DOOR.

MIKE
Hi, I’m not too early am I?

KATIE
(SMILES) No.
Come in.

MIKE
Oh this is for you.

HE HANDS HER THE DRAWING.

THE CAMERA SHOOTS A CAR PARKED ACROSS THE STREET.


JOHNNY, PETE AND RAY WATCH AS MIKE ENTERS THE HOUSE. THE DOOR CLOSES BEHIND HIM.

INSIDE KATIE’S HOUSE.

THE LIVING ROOM.

TWENTY (OR SO) OF KATIE’S FRIENDS AND FELLOW STUDENT’S ARE EITHER STOOD TALKING OR DANCING.

THE LIGHTS ARE TURNED DOWN LOW AND PARTY LIGHTS HAVE BEEN HUNG UP.

A TABLE WITH FOOD AND DRINKS IS SET AT ONE END OF THE ROOM.

SEVERAL STUDENT’S NUDGE EACH OTHER AND GIGGLE AS MIKE ENTERS THE LIVING ROOM.

KATIE FOLLOWS ON BEHIND HIM.

MIKE
TO KATIE
Are you going to open it?

KATIE
Sure.

KATIE’S BEST FRIEND’S JENNIFER AND STEPHANIE LOOK OVER HER SHOULDER AS SHE UNWRAPS THE DRAWING.

JENNIFER GIGGLES AS SHE SEE’S THAT THE DRAWING IS OF KATIE.


KATIE

(IN SURPRISE)
Oh….thanks Mike..
It’s…….


STEPHANIE
Different….
(TRIES TO HIDE HER SMILE).
In a good way.

KATIE
(TO MIKE)
Why don’t you help
Yourself to a drink.

KATIE POINTS OVER TO THE TABLE

MIKE
Oh ok. Are you coming Katie?

KATIE
Just give me a minute.

MIKE SLOWLY WALKS AWAY FROM KATIE AND GOES TOWARDS THE TABLE.

BOTH JENNIFER AND STEPHANIE ROAR WITH LAUGHTER.

JENNIFER
So what does it feel
Like to be the object
Of freak boy’s affections?





KATIE
(LAUGHS)
Will you stop it!
Just tray and act normal ok?
I don’t want to blow
This for Johnny.

OUTSIDE IN THE CAR

RAY
When are we goin’ in?
I’m gaspin’ for a beer.

JOHNNY
Soon. Just be cool. I can’t
Wait to see the look on his face!
This is gonna be a fuckin’ classic!


INSIDE OF KATIE’S HOUSE.

MIKE IS SAT IN A CHAIR, WITH A GLASS OF COKE. HE IS WATCHING THE OTHERS DANCE.

THE DOOR BELL GOES AND KATIE LEAVES THE ROOM TO ANSWER THE DOOR.

KATIE OPENS THE FRONT DOOR. KAI IS STOOD OUTSIDE.

KAI
Where’s mike?

KATIE STARES BLANKLY AT HIM.

KAI
I’ve come here to get him.

KATIE
So now your Mikie’s minder?
He’s having a good time,
Now f*** off.

SHE TRIES TO SHUT THE DOOR BUT, KAI JAMS HIS FOOT IN THE DOORWAY.
KAI
Like I said I’ve come to
Get him.

KATIE
(SHRUGGS)
Well if you really want
To see your precious
Little friend humiliated
that’s up to you.

KAI
What?

SHE OPENS THE DOOR.

KAI PUSHES PAST HER.

JENNIFER WALKS OVER TO MIKE AND SIT’S DOWN.

JENNIFER
Hey Mike, Katie would
Really like to dance with you
but she’s too shy to ask.

MIKE
She would?


JENNIFER
Yes.
Look here she comes.
Why don’t you ask her now?

MIKE
(SMILES)
Ok.

KAI ENTERS THE ROOM, KATIE IS BEHIND HIM.

KAI
Mike.…mike I have
To talk to you.

MIKE STANDS UP. HE WALKS OVER TO KATIE AND IGNORES KAI.

MIKE
Katie….Will you dance
With me?

KATIE
(IN SURPRISE)
Dance?…..
LOOKS AT THE WALL CLOCK
Sure.

MIKE SMILES AND TAKES HOLD OF HER HAND. HE LEADS HER OVER TO WHERE THE OTHER STUDENT’S ARE DANCING.

MIKE AND KATIE START TO DANCE.

KAI
Mike!

MIKE
(OVER HIS SHOULDER)
f*** off Kai.

KATIE
(SMILES TO KAI)
Yeh f*** off Kai.

MIKE
(TO KATIE)
Did you really like my
Drawing?


KATIE
NODS.

MIKE
SMILES

HE MOVES IN CLOSER TO KATIE AS THEY DANCE.

JENNIFER LEAVES THE ROOM. SHE WALKS THROUGH THE HALLWAY AND INTO THE KITCHEN SHE OPENS THE BACK DOOR.

JOHNNY, PETE AND RAY ENTER THE HOUSE.

IN THE LIVING ROOM.

KATIE TRIES TO DISTANCE HERSELF FROM MIKE. SHE PUTS HER HAND ON MIKES LEFT FOREARM.

MIKE FLINCHES. A LITTLE BLOOD SOAKS THROUGH HIS SHIRT.

KATIE
What’s this?

JOHNNY, PETE AND RAY ENTER THE LIVING ROOM.

JENNIFER WHISPERS IN RAY’S EAR. RAY TURNS ROUND AND WALKS OVER TO KAI.

RAY PRODUCES A SWITCH BLADE, HIS WORDS TO KAI ARE MUFFLED BY THE MUSIC.

KAI, LOOKS OVER AT MIKE AND THEN HURRIEDLY LEAVES.

THE CAMERA FOCUSES IN ON MIKE AND KATIE.

MIKE
Nothing….Katie please don’t

KATIE TIGHTENS HER GRIP ON MIKES ARM.

KATIE
SEEING JOHNNY.
Hey Johnny, come
and Look at this.

JOHNNY WALKS OVER TO KATIE.

MIKE LOOKS HORRIFIED, WHEN HE REALIZES THAT JOHNNY, PETE AND RAY HAVE ARRIVED.

JOHNNY
Well, well if it isn’t
Little Mikie.


KATIE
I think the freaks
Cut himself.

JOHNNY SEIZES HOLD OF MIKE’S ARM.

THE STUDENT’S ALL TURN ROUND AND LOOK AT MIKE. THE MUSIC IS TURNED OFF.


MIKE
(IN HORROR)
Katie no…. .

JOHNNY ROLLS UP MIKE’S SLEEVE.

JOHNNY
K..a..tie
You sick little f***.
Did you get off on this?

MIKE BREAKS AWAY FROM JOHNNY’S GRIP. HE RUNS TOWARDS THE DOOR. PETE AND RAY MAKE A GRAB FOR HIM, BUT THEY BOTH MISS.

MIKE RUNS THROUGH THE KITCHEN. HE OPENS THE BACK DOOR AND RUNS INTO THE YARD.

PETE AND RAY ARE HOT ON HIS TAIL.

MIKE REACHES A WIRE FENCE AND TRIES TO CLIMB OVER IT.

PETE AND RAY REACH THE FENCE, THEY MAKE A GRAB FOR MIKE’S LEGS AND PULL HIM OFF THE FENCE AND ONTO THE GROUND.


PETE
Not so fast you
Little creep.

THEY HAUL MIKE TO HIS FEET, AND DRAG HIM BACK TO THE HOUSE.

MIKE
Just let me go….
I never should have
Come here.

RAY
But you did Mikie,
And now we are
Gonna have some fun!

PETE, RAY AND MIKE ENTER THE KITCHEN. KATIE IS WAITING FOR THEM.

KATIE
(SMILING)
Good you got him.

MIKE
Katie why?



KATE
God Mike you need
an explanation?
Just Look at you,
You little skank, you repulse me!

PETE AND RAY DRAG MIKE BACK INTO THE LIVING ROOM. THEY THROW HIM INTO A NEAR BY CHAIR.


JOHNNY
(TO PETE AND RAY)
Hold him down. We don’t
Want him escaping again!

MIKE
No…please.

PETE AND RAY HOLD MIKE DOWN IN THE CHAIR.

JOHNNY WALKS OVER TO THE TABLE WITH THE DRINKS ON.

JOHNNY
( TO KATIE)
Got anything stronger?

KATIE
Just a second.

KATIE LEAVES THE LIVING ROOM, SHE GOES INTO THE KITCHEN AND TAKES A BOTTLE OF WHISKEY OUT OF THE CUPBOARD.

KATIE GOES BACK INTO THE LIVING ROOM. SHE WALKS UP TO JOHNNY AND HANDS HIM THE WHISKEY.

JOHNNY OPENS THE BOTTLE. HE TAKES A SWIG.

JOHNNY
Open wide Mikie.

HE LEANS OVER MIKE AND PUTS THE BOTTLE TO HIS LIPS. THE WHISKEY SPILLS DOWN THE FRONT OF MIKE’S SHIRT.

MIKE GASPS AS HE SWOLLOWS SOME OF THE WHISKEY.

JOHNNY TAKES THE BOTTLE AND TIPS SOME OF IT OVER HIS CUT ARM.


MIKE
(CRIES OUT).

JOHNNY
We don’t want mikie to get
A nasty infection now do we?

HE PRODUCES A KNIFE OUT OF HIS POCKET.


MIKE
(STRUGGLES TRYING TO GET FREE)
Oh god no!

JOHNNY
Just so you know who she
Belongs to.

KATIE
And it’s not you….
You little s***.

JOHNNY STARTS TO CUT HIS OWN NAME INTO MIKE’S ARM UNDERNEATH KATIE’S.

MIKE
(HOLLORS)
Please….

KATIE PICKS UP THE DRAWING MIKE DID OF HER.


KATIE
And as for this, ugly
s***! You think you can draw?

JOHNNY LOOKS OVER AT THE DRAWING.

JOHNNY
Whose that mean’t
To be your dead mother?

MIKE
(IN TEARS)
Let me go….
Just let me go home.

KATIE SMILES SHE TEARS THE DRAWING IN HALF AND THROWS IT AT MIKE.

JOHNNY WITHDRAWS FROM MIKE.

JOHNNY
There Mikie boy all done.

THE CAMERA SHOOTS A CLOSE UP OF MIKE’S ARM, WITH BOTH JOHNNY AND KATIES NAMES CUT INTO IT.

JOHNNY GRIN’S, HE TIPS THE REST OF THE WHISKEY OVER MIKE’S HEAD.

JOHNNY
Now you smell just
Like your daddy.

EVERYONE IN THE ROOM LAUGHS.

MIKE PULLS HIMSELF FREE FROM, PETE AND RAY’S GRIP. HE PUSHES PAST JOHNNY AND RUNS OVER TO THE DOOR.

JOHNNY
Hey Mikie!

MIKE TURNS ROUND. JOHNNY TAKES HOLD OF KATIE AND HUGS HER.

MIKE TURNS AND RUNS TO THE FRONT DOOR. HE TEARS IT OPEN AND RUNS FROM THE HOUSE.

MONDAY MORNING

MIKE’S HOUSE

MIKE’S BEDROOM.


MIKE IS SAT SHAKING ON THE FLOOR. HIS EYES DART AROUND THE ROOM. HE IS STILL WEARING HIS CLOTHES FROM THE PARTY.


THE CAMERA SHOOTS VARIOUS DRAWINGS OF MIKE‘S.

ALL THE CHARACTERS HAVE GOT GUNS.

MIKE PULLS HIMSELF UP. HE WALKS OVER TO THE DOOR AND OPENS IT AND GOES OUT ON TO THE LANDING.

HE WALKS DOWNSTAIRS AND GOES DOWN INTO THE BASEMENT.
HE STOPS IN FRONT OF A WOODEN GUN CABINET.

HE TRIES THE CATCH , BUT ITS LOCKED. HE MAKES HIS HAND INTO A FIST AND PUNCHES IN THE GLASS.

HE TAKES OUT A RIFLE, AND REVOLVER AND LOADS THEM WITH AMMUNITION. HE PUTS TWO BOXES OF AMMUNITION INTO HIS POCKET.

MIKE WALKS PAST THE LIVING ROOM.

MIKE’S FATHER IS SAT IN AN ARM CHAIR.


FATHER
Where do you think your
Goin‘?

MIKE ENTERS THE ROOM, HE PUTS THE RIFLE BEHIND HIS BACK.


FATHER

Don’t just stand there you
Useless little shit….
bring me a beer.

MIKE
(SMILES)
Sure.

HE TAKES OUT THE RIFLE AND AIMS IT AT HIS FATHER AND SHOOTS HIM IN THE HEAD.


HE TURNS AND LEAVES THE ROOM. HE WALKS TO THE FRONT DOOR. HE TURNS AND GLANCES ROUND, BEFORE LEAVING THE HOUSE.


AT THE HIGH SCHOOL.

MIKE WALKS UP THE STAIRS LEADING TO THE MAIN ENTRANCE. HE OPENS THE DOOR AND ENTERS THE MAIN CORRIDOR.

A GROUP OF STUDENTS LOOK UP AND SMILE AT MIKE.

MIKE AIMS THE RIFLE AT THE GROUP AND FIRES AT RANDOM.

THE STUDENTS FALL DOWN DEAD.

THE HALLWAY IS FILLED WITH SCREAMING.

MIKE WALKS OVER THE DEAD BODIES.

SEVERAL STUDENTS RUN TOWARDS ONE OF THE CLASS ROOMS.

MIKE TAKES OUT THE REVOLVER AND SHOOTS THEM ALL, ONE BY ONE.

MIKE’S FACE IS SPRAYED BY THEIR BLOOD.

KAI IS STOOD BY THE LOCKERS FROZEN IN FEAR. HE STOPS AS MIKE APPROACHES HIM.

KAI
Jesus….Mike.

MIKE AIMS THE REVOLVER AT KAI.

KAI PUTS HIS HANDS UP.

KAI
Mike……


MIKE PAUSES AND SMILES. HE WALKS PAST KAI AND CARRIES ON DOWN THE CORRIDOR.

A MALE TEACHER CONFRONTS MIKE IN THE CORRIDOR.

HE MAKES A GRAB FOR THE RIFLE.

MIKE MOVES THE RIFLE OUT OF THE WAY AND SMASHES IT DOWN ON THE TEACHERS HEAD.

THE TEACHER FALLS TO THE GROUND. MIKE RELOADS THE RIFLE AND PLACES THE BARREL OF IT IN THE TEACHERS MOUTH

HE PULLS THE TRIGGER.


IN AN EMPTY CLASS ROOM

PETE
What the hells goin‘ on?



JOHNNY
SMOKING A JOINT
Who cares…
PASSES THE JOINT TO RAY.


PETE WALKS OVER TO THE DOOR. HE SLOWLY OPENS IT AND LOOKS OUT.

HE IS GREETED WITH THE SIGHT OF STUDENTS AND TEACHERS RUNNING IN PANIC AS MIKE APPROACHES THEM.

PETE WITHDRAWS AND CLOSES THE DOOR.

PETE
SHAKING
Fuck…it’s him.


JOHNNY
Who?

MIKE BURSTS INTO A CLASS ROOM. KATIE AND THREE OTHER GIRLS ARE HIDING UNDER THE DESKS.

MIKE
Get out….

THE FOUR GIRLS SLOWLY EMERGE FROM UNDER THE DESKS.

MIKE
TO THE THREE GIRLS
I said get out…..

THE THREE GIRLS AND KATIE RUN TO THE DOOR.

MIKE
TO KATIE
Not you.


HE REACHES OUT AND GRABS HOLD OF HER HAIR, PULLING HER BACK INTO THE ROOM.

THE OTHER GIRLS HURRIEDLY RUN OUT OF THE ROOM.

MIKE PUSHES KATIE ONTO THE FLOOR AND AIMS THE REVOLVER AT HER.

KATIE
Mike please…..

MIKE
(SARCASTICALLY)
Mike please…..

KATIE
I’m sorry…..I’m sorry.
He made me do it…

MIKE BENDS DOWN NEXT TO KATIE. HE TOUCHES HER CHEEK.

MIKE
Of course he did. Did he
Hold a knife to your throat?
Did he threaten to cut you ?

KATIE
…..No, but he threatened
To beat me.



MIKE
(SARCASTICALLY)
Oh Poor baby.

KATIE
I do like you really ….
I do……………………

MIKE
(SHAKES HIS HEAD)
No you just want to live.

KATIE
IN TEARS
Yes.

MIKE
So do I.

MIKE STANDS UP. HE AIMS THE REVOLVER AT KATIE


KATIE
No.….
LOOKS AT THE DOOR
SCREAMING
Help me….



MIKE
Your beloved boyfriend can’t
save you now.

MIKE FIRES THE REVOLVER AND SHOOTS KATIE THROUGH THE HEAD.


OUTSIDE IN THE CORRIDOR.

JOHNNY HEARS THE GUNSHOT.

JOHNNY
Katie?

JOHNNY LOOKS AT PETE AND RAY. THEY ALL RUN DOWN THE CORRIDOR TOWARDS THE GUN SHOT.

THEY STOP OUTSIDE OF THE CLASS ROOM.

JOHNNY SLOWLY PUSHES THE DOOR OPEN. HE SEES KATIE’S BODY LAYING ON THE GROUND. AN ADJACENT DOOR IS SWINGING OPEN (MIKE’S EXIT ROUTE).

JOHNNY
Bastard!


OUTSIDE OF THE SCHOOL.

AN ARMY OF POLICE CAR’S, THREE AMBULANCES AND A LOCAL NEWS REPORTING TEAM ARE OUTSIDE OF THE SCHOOLS MAIN ENTRANCE.


A SMALL GROUP OF STUDENTS, (INCLUDING KAI) AND SEVERAL TEACHERS ARE STOOD OUTSIDE.




NEWS REPORTER.
I can confirm that a series
Of gun shots have been fired.
The lone gun man is
Believed to be sixteen year
old student Michael Warner a pupil
At this high school.

GUN SHOTS ARE HEARD.


NEWS REPORTER
I have just heard more
gun shots coming from inside
The building ……. .


INSIDE THE SCHOOL.

JOHNNY RUNS OVER TO THE LOCKERS. HE HURRIEDLY OPENS UP HIS LOCKER AND REACHES INTO THE BACK OF IT. HE PRODUCES A HUNTING KNIFE AND TUCKS IT INTO HIS BELT.


MIKE BURSTS INTO THE SPORTS HALL.

HE GLANCES ROUND, THE HALL IS EMPTY.

OUTSIDE OF THE SCHOOL.

A GROUP OF POLICE OFFICERS ARE CROUCHED DOWN NEXT TO THEIR VEHICLES. THEY HAVE ALL HAVE GOT FIRE ARMS AIMED AT THE MAIN DOOR.


A SWAT TEAM IS ALSO ON THE SCENE AND THEY SET ABOUT SURROUNDING THE SCHOOL.


POLICE CHIEF
(USING MEGAPHONE)
You are surrounded……
Michael… I urge you to give
Yourself up now, before anyone
else gets hurt.
(TO THE SWAT TEAM).
I want him brought out alive
Understood?


INSIDE THE SPORTS HALL.

MIKE HEARS A NOISE BEHIND HIM. HE TURNS ROUND, POINTING THE RIFLE IN FRONT OF HIM.

PETE AND RAY ARE STOOD BEHIND HIM WITH BASEBALL BATS.

MIKE STOPS IN FRONT OF THEM. HE OPENS THE RIFLE AND SLOWLY RELOADS IT.

PETE AND RAY LOOK AT EACH OTHER.

MIKE IN LIGHTENING SPEED AIMS THE RIFLE AT PETE AND RAY AND FIRES.

THE BULLET PASSES THROUGH BOTH PETE AND RAY’S HEADS SIMULTANEOUSLY.

BOTH FALL DOWN DEAD AT MIKE‘S FEET.

MIKE STARES AT THE DEAD BODIES. HE THEN WALKS PAST THE BODIES AND OVER TO THE DOOR.

OUTSIDE.

THE NEWS REPORTER IS INTERVIEWING SOME OF THE STUDENTS.



GIRL BEING INTERVIEWED.
He’s kind of quiet….
You know. He’s kind of
A loner.

BOY INTERUPTING
He’s kind of a loser.
That guys a freak…
And everyone knows it.

KAI RUNS OVER TO THE BOY AND GIRL BEING INTERVIEWED.

KAI
That’s bullshit. Do you want to
Know why he’s doing this?
Johnny fucking Miller is the
Reason why he’s doing this.

NEWS REPORTER
Who’s Johnny Miller?

INSIDE THE SCHOOL.

MIKE REACHES A STAIRCASE LEADING UP TO MORE CLASS ROOMS.

HE GLANCES BACK DOWN THE CORRIDOR. HE THEN WALKS UP THE STAIRCASE.

ON THE NEXT LANDING HE WALKS PAST AN OPEN DOORWAY. JOHNNY STEPS OUT BEHIND HIM. HE STRIKES MIKE ON THE BACK OF THE HEAD WITH HIS FIST.

MIKE FALLS DAZED TO THE FLOOR.

JOHNNY KICKS THE RIFLE OUT OF HIS HAND. HE REACHES OUT AND PULLS MIKE UP.

HE PUNCHES HIM SEVERAL TIMES, AND HOLDS HIM UP AGAINST A WALL.

JOHNNY WITHDRAWS THE KNIFE FROM HIS BELT. HE HOLDS IT UP TO MIKE’S THROAT.

JOHNNY
This is for my girl.

MIKE REACHES INTO HIS COAT POCKET. HE FIRES THE SMALL REVOLVER THROUGH HIS COAT POCKET AND INTO JOHNNY’S SIDE.

JOHNNY FALLS BACK, AWAY FROM MIKE.

MIKE REACHES FORWARD AND SEIZES HOLD OF JOHNNY.

MIKE
And this is for me….

HE SMASHES JOHNNY’S HEAD AGAINST THE WALL, LEAVING HIM SEMI CONSCIOUS.

MIKE HAULS JOHNNY UP.

MIKE
I could just shoot you….
But where’s the fun in that?

MIKE DRAGS JOHNNY DOWN THE CORRIDOR. HE PUSHES OPEN ONE OF THE CLASS ROOM DOORS.

INSIDE IS THE SCIENCE LAB.

MIKE PUSHES JOHNNY DOWN INTO A NEAR BY CHAIR.

HE AIMS THE REVOLVER AND SHOOTS JOHNNY IN BOTH HIS LEGS.

JOHNNY
YELLS IN AGONY
Shit….You fuckin’ bastard.

MIKE WALKS OVER TO ONE OF THE WORK STATIONS.

HE LIGHTS ONE OF THE BUNSON BURNERS. AND BRINGS IT OVER TO WHERE JOHNNY IS SAT.

JOHNNY
What are you doing?

MIKE
Sending you to hell
Where you belong.

JOHNNY AND MIKE’S EYE’S MEET. JOHNNY THEN FIXES HIS GAZE ON MIKES HAND, (HOLDING THE BUNSON BURNER).


JOHNNY
You don’t have the gut’s.


MIKE SMILES AT JOHNNY. HE THEN DROPS THE BUNSON BURNER INTO JOHNNYS LAP.

JOHNNY HOLLORS AND FLAYS HIS ARMS, AS HIS CLOTHES CATCH FIRE..

MIKE DRAGS JOHNNY UP BY THE HAIR AND HE FLINGS HIM THROUGH A NEAR BY WINDOW.

JOHNNY LANDS DEAD, ON TOP OF ONE OF THE POLICE CARS.

SCREAMING IS HEARD.

MIKE TURNS AWAY FROM THE WINDOW.


OUTSIDE OF THE SCHOOL.

THE SWAT TEAM MOVE IN CLOSER TO THE MAIN ENTRANCE.



INSIDE THE SCHOOL.

MIKE WALKS DOWN THE STAIRCASE AND TOWARDS THE MAIN ENTRANCE.

THE STUDENTS AND TEACHERS OUTSIDE ARE MOVED TO SAFETY.

KAI MANAGES TO SPLIT FROM THE GROUP. HE DUCKS DOWN BEHIND A POLICE CAR, AND WATCHES THE MAIN ENTRANCE.


MIKE, DRENCHED IN BLOOD, OPENS THE MAIN ENTRANCE DOOR. AND WALKS OUTSIDE.

A HELICOPTER CIRCLES OVER HEAD.

POLICE CHIEF
(ON MEGA PHONE)
Come out with your hands up.

MIKE WALKS DOWN THE STAIRS, WITH THE REVOLVER INFRONT OF HIM.

KAI
Mike what are you doing?

POLICE CHIEF
I said put your hands up.
Michael…please don’t do this.

MIKE CONTINUES TO WALK FORWARD. HE LOOKS ROUND AT THE CROWD WHICH HAS GATHERED.

MIKE SMILES AND SALUTES AT KAI.

HE PUTS THE REVOLVER INSIDE OF HIS MOUTH AND PULLS THE TRIGGER.

KAI
No!

KAI RUNS TOWARDS MIKE, BUT HE IS HELD BACK BY TWO POLICE OFFICERS.

THE CAMERA SHOOTS MIKE’S BODY FROM ABOVE. IT CLOSES IN ON HIS EYES.

THE CAMERA DRAWS BACK AND DISPLAYS MIKE’S IMAGE ON A TV SCREEN.


VO: Michael Warner claimed the lives of fourteen students and teachers including his own father, during today’s massacre. Warner’s motives are unclear, but it is thought that he was possibly the victim of bullying…….

A TWELVE YEAR OLD BOY IS SAT IN THE LIVING ROOM, DRAWING. THE CAMERA SHOOTS OVER HIS SHOULDER. THE BOY IS DRAWING A SELF PORTRAIT OF HIMSELF SHOOTING ANOTHER BOY.

THE BOY LOOKS AT THE CAMERA.

THE SCENE FADES TO BLACK


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Post by youngfilmmaker » Sat Mar 31, 2007 12:48 am

There is the script, so the whole community can see it.

The first prority is getting premission from the school.

Anyone can get me an example or tips i should use to get premission from the school?
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Post by Jperson » Sat Apr 07, 2007 10:48 pm

I think if you want to make a bit spooky as well (sorry I haven't read the script and I know this may be a little late for adding bits) he could have something like some stupid show 'n' tell. And thte teacher is like winding him up: 'So, do you actually have something this time?'
'Sure!' (Whips out gun). :D Police cars can all be put in digitally, pictures etc from net... Also try and minimilise the amount of time you see the cops just add the heavy presence of sound FX to keep it cheaper. Look into duplication of police men/women? I also think that kene is right, you need to make it look like the police are coming in in force. Maybe helicopter SFX?

I'll get back to you with more ideas as I have them...

P.S. Sorry for not reading the scripts yet, I'm sure you'll forgive me though. I will do as soon as possible. :D
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Post by angusware » Sat Apr 07, 2007 11:57 pm

first of all, just a little grammar thing, stood should be standing and sat should be sitting unless you describe it in the past.

At the end, I think Mike should not kill Katie, because this destroys his image of a person who has just cracked suddenly. He comes across as malicious.
Perhaps just before he shoots her he decides to save her, because he is stll in love with her?

I also think that he comes across as cruel and twisted, whihc isn't such a good thing as he is your anti-hero kinda guy. Perhaps illustrating him as cruel ruins the story of his
pain and suffering leading up to the killing, because anyone who is twisted and sick can go and shoot up a school, but here is more to him?

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Post by Jperson » Sun Apr 08, 2007 12:06 am

Maybe make it almost like someone with two people in them. There's one side that doesn't want to do it, wants to be normal etc. but then a dark and sinister side that is like making him do these things, so when he shoots his hand is shaking etc. Breaks down and crys after killing people + says sorry when/before/after he shoots people.
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Post by kene555 » Sun Apr 08, 2007 10:17 pm

I think you should stick with him killing Katie. Here's this one person, one of the very few people he considers friends. He goes out on a limb for her and cares for her, believes in her. Then she goes behind his back, turns on him, and screws him completely. This is a great point in the film where viewers can think "Man, this really sucks! You can really sympathize with him then, which gives him a reason for killing her. Then maybe you can add a scene in school, with everyone running around screaming and the audio fades while he looks at her at gunpoint and considers, then you have some flashbacks. He struggles with the decision, we see it in his eyes, then he kills her anyways. Or maybe something happens - he sees something out of the corner of his eye that causes him to pull the trigger - like a kid running at him, so he kills Katie by reflex then kills the kid.

But I still say keep that part in.
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Post by youngfilmmaker » Mon Apr 09, 2007 8:50 pm

I want to thank you guys for giving me suggestions. I will consider each for the script.
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Post by angusware » Mon Apr 09, 2007 11:37 pm

i definately think there should be some callous revenge getting, but he needs to kill katie in a much more dramatised way, maybe he shows remorse as he is shooting her?

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Post by youngfilmmaker » Tue Apr 10, 2007 1:35 am

What is a cruel way to kill Katie? Any suggestions. With a chainsaw. LOL

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Post by angusware » Tue Apr 10, 2007 7:34 am

he could strangle her, as if he is clenching with rage around her neck, and her eyballs can pop and ooze like soft-boiled egg onto his hands.

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Post by Jperson » Tue Apr 10, 2007 10:33 am

Yeah, no he should kill her like Nero killed is first wife. He just goes up to here and is really angry and starts just punching her, then she falls over and starts kicking her, and he's like really incensesed. Then he realises what he's done and breaks down like crying next to her, like he didn't mean to kill her.
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Post by angusware » Tue Apr 10, 2007 10:47 am

^ I Like it!

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Post by Jperson » Tue Apr 10, 2007 10:55 am

^ I like angusware's post. :D
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Post by angusware » Wed Apr 11, 2007 1:12 am

it's os much easier than quoting, means i don't have to click a button.

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Post by Metronome1 » Wed Apr 11, 2007 4:01 am

titles:

Mad Mikey

Kill Kate

Massacre High

Pressure

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Post by angusware » Thu Apr 12, 2007 12:39 am

^ or not. make it something different, so you don't get the entire story before you've even finsihed reading the title.

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Post by Metronome1 » Fri Apr 13, 2007 12:30 am

Cause and Effect

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Post by Jperson » Fri Apr 13, 2007 7:46 pm

^Effect and causse. angusware, lol, it is so much quicker just doing that than quoting, wow, I'm a different person. :D Anyhow, I think you should call the film the "Human Rights Activist Salad". Hmm...
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